Comments | lupa_libri: Getting Over It (Jayne/Simon, PG)

frk_werewolf in lupa_libri

Getting Over It (Jayne/Simon, PG)

Jul 20, 2006 20:39

Title: Getting Over It
Fandom: Firefly
tamingthemuse Prompt: #2 Mens Rea (the guilty mind)
Pairing: Jayne/Simon
Warnings: alchohol, men kissing, 1 curse word
Rating: PG
Word count: 1,274
Summary: Jayne, in an attempt to rectify his own stupidity, takes Simon out as an apology. Post-Ariel.
Author Notes: I can't write their accents to save my life.

( getting over it )

jayne/simon, firefly, tamingthemuse

Comments 17

authoressnebula July 21 2006, 02:50:45 UTC

I don't do Jayne/Simon. That being said, this was AWESOME. Drunk!Simon and drunk!Jayne have become my two new favorite loves.

I know you were worried about grammar, but I think you're okay with this one. I didn't spot any mistakes; you're looking clean and smooth on this one for flowing!

I liked this. I really liked this. Well done you! *smooch*

~Nebula

frk_werewolf July 21 2006, 02:56:13 UTC

Thank you so much! Hee! I love making characters drunk. It's so fun.

Thank you. ^_^

lachatdelarue July 21 2006, 03:18:14 UTC

I'd never even thought of shipping Jayne/Simon, but that little story makes me seriously consider it :D and your characters' lines sounded fine. Just enough dialect to make them sound like... well them, without over doing it (which some people do). And I love it when Simon curses! it's just so CUTE!

frk_werewolf July 21 2006, 03:20:51 UTC

It is adorable when he curses, isn't it? Hee! Something about an upstanding proper young man cursing: nothing can make you smile more.

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it.

bugchicklv July 21 2006, 03:49:13 UTC

OH! I love it. Poor Jayne...he must really hate that attack of conscience that keeps cropping up on account of the people on this ship! And in trying to apologize, selfish reason aside, he DID TRY.

And poor Simon! Pouring his heart out like that only to have it crushed in Jayne's meaty palm. When he sobers up he'll be pissed but at least he knows. And when it stops hurting he'll realize he CAN trust Jayne (sorta) because HE DID TELL HIM.

(One typo though: "...ignoring the few looks he received from the other costumers." I think you meant CUSTOMERS.)

frk_werewolf July 21 2006, 03:58:58 UTC

Thank you. Yeah, poor Jayne and Simon. They keep trying and then things fall apart. Perhaps next time they should have this conversation without the alchohol.

Thanks for the typo alert!

lilithbint July 21 2006, 04:20:18 UTC

Very nicely done,
accents don't have to be written to be there, you managed it with words and turns of phrase.

frk_werewolf July 21 2006, 04:28:17 UTC

Thank you. I was hoping to keep them--or rather, Jayne--sounding like themselves without resorting to accent writing. lol.

strickens_girl July 21 2006, 05:10:51 UTC

Wow. This was so good. I love the interaction between these two. The tension, the sillyness, it all seems perfect.

*hugs*

frk_werewolf July 21 2006, 05:12:39 UTC

*hugs back* Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. ^_^