fic: asylum (I will not take these things for granted, anymore) (part two of probably five)

[luninosity]

And part two...

Title: Asylum (I Will Not Take These Things For Granted, Anymore) (part two of probably five) (part one here)
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: explicit sex, D/s dynamics, mention of non-con in the past, healing, wedding-day emotions
Word Count: 24,722 total; 6,190 for this part
Disclaimers: boys’re not mine, only doing this out of

Comments

[shayzgirl]

I once wrote a ceremony for a fic and I found others quite liked it, even if it wasn't quite the same idea they'd had in mind. And definitely, you can write the ceremony however you'd like.

I did like the shift in POV. You did it so well. I always feel like when I write a change in POV that it's jarring, so I usually stick to one unless I have valid reason to switch. I think I also liked the idea of their families there together for the event, Joy and Catherine especially, I have a fondness for their sisters (and the fact that Catherine is an older sister and Joy is a younger sister amuses me somehow.)

The hotels I stayed at in the UK were nicer than majority of the ones I've stayed at in the US and even just the hotels here, even the "super nice" one still just comes as a room with a bed, bathroom, minibar and it's always been a bit of a let down, at least for me, after what I had in the UK that weren't super nice ones. Though I do live in Idaho, so I guess for Idaho they are "super nice". I would gladly enjoy a tour, though, of something historic and architecturally fantastic. :D

[luninosity]

I think the POV shifts can be jarring if not handled carefully, yes. I'm always nervous about them. But I try to do it based on whose emotional reaction I think might be most...complex/relevant to the story/character growth. Like, we could've had Michael POV for the top!James, but it's actually most significant for James, emotionally, so it's nice to see that.

I think their families would want to be there, to be supportive! Even without knowing the full extent of the ordeal, they know something bad happened; and even without that, this is a momentous occasion! It matters, if they're there. :-)

Interesting, about the hotels! I do feel like the UK hotels have more character, but I've always thought the US at least wins as far as bathrooms go! More generic, but more comfortable--it's a trade-off. :-p Our particular historic hotel dates from the 1800s, and has all kinds of interesting features, and a beautiful Spanish colonial altar in the chapel. The one in this icon is Gregynog House, in Wales, where I stayed for a conference once. Just wonderful, like something out of, well, the Narnia books! You'd expect magical portals round every corner...

[shayzgirl]

I had many issues with the POV shift for the film au, which is why in the end I stuck to James' POV since the film I based it on primarily focused on Andrew, so I thought the other side POV would be good. Especially in fic. I keep debating about POV shift for the mpreg w/twins fic because I like writing it from James' pov since he is the one who is pregnant and yet I think it'd be fun and interesting to write from Michael's too since he's worry about James and also maybe a bit jealous, especially for things like feeling the babies move and such. I might attempt it and if I don't like it, keep it out in the final version.

It is definitely something they'd be there for, regardless of the other stuff. Especially when the beginning of the engagement, I do remember James' grandmother being very happy for them (and something about wanting grand kids out of them despite James being her grandson. I've maybe read some of this verse too much for my own good...)

There were only a couple of hotels in the UK where I absolutely hated the stairs, but everywhere else they were so grand and beautiful and fun to climb up, even with a suitcase. I honestly don't even know if the "super nice" hotel has stairs. I've only ever used the elevator to get from floor to floor. O.o

[luninosity]

I might attempt it and if I don't like it, keep it out in the final version.

That's what revision's for, right? :D I do agree that both perspectives there would be interesting--different, I'd think. You could always write it one way, then do one of those "X Story--from the other side" rewrites.

Especially when the beginning of the engagement, I do remember James' grandmother being very happy for them (and something about wanting grand kids out of them despite James being her grandson.

Ahahaha yep. I know exactly which lines you mean, too: she asks them how she's going to get grandbabies out of them, and James is amused, thinking about the instinctive choice of terminology, about what that says about him being thought of as their son. :-) (And all the re-reading is a compliment, you know!)

I don't mind stairs, but then I am an able-bodied person. I wondered about that quite a lot, at Cambridge: it's just physically not possible to renovate those medieval rooms well...

[shayzgirl]

Definitely what revisions are for. One of the reasons I'm enjoying the hand write first then type up, because it does give me the extra revision between the two. A friend did suggest maybe doing like "Missing scenes" type things if I didn't want to do an entire fic from the other side. She did that with one of hers and I really liked those short little scenes. Might do that, too.

It was one of my fave bits of dialogue before things went bad. Especially since it fits a bit with a couple of interviews I've read with James, where he does talk about his grandparents in such a way, the fact that his parents weren't around, he had his grandparents and his sister only, so they might as well have been his parents anyway.

I hated the stairs more for awkward luggage travels (there was one that had small and narrow and windy stairs and we were on the 15th floor, but the elevator was a bit too horror movie for my taste so I traveled the stairs instead, on the way up at least.)