Contradiction

[lunaticxpandora]

Sometimes it doesn't feel real. Luke, Asch, spoilers.
[Tales of the Abyss] K, general, 2084 words, published 03-15-07

Comments

[aefallen]

*grin* Thank you for writing this! Made sense to me! I quite enjoyed it - I liked the way you wrote the Asch-Luke interaction, and I liked their exchanges. Like this:

"Hmph." Asch snorts, and rolls his eyes at his replica. "You can see the snow just as well from inside, stupid," he points out.

He frowns. "But then I can't feel it,"
This was fun. *smiles*

"If I had, I would have told you," Asch says, and the implied 'idiot' is more than apparent in his exasperated tone.
Nice. *smiles* I don't read nearly as much Asch-Luke interaction as I would like, and I liked this.

He wonders if they are as really both as worthless as they feel, or if either of them are even really worthless at all. He wonders how they can both end up feeling the same way about themselves, and if it because of their upbringing or because they are original and replica.
I like that you saw that. Especially the second line.

And Asch, of course, had to be stubborn and difficult and do things his own way.
That's what makes him Asch. Heh.

[replica]

aw, thank you much! Glad to hear you enjoyed, and that it made sense. It wasn't quite what I'd originally had in mind, so I was a bit unsure about it. And, the lines you pointed out are some of my favourite ones, actually :D

That's what makes him Asch. Heh.
So true. I wouldn't have him any other way <3

[meimi]

Aw, it turned out rather well. :3 Both Luke and Asch come through crystal clear. XD They're both such morons about these sort of things. I really enjoyed it!

[replica]

Ah, thank you! Glad you liked~ :3 Haha, they really are, aren't they? XD

[niffe]

I like it. The grammar was kind of off, but not so much that it was illegible. I hope you write more!

[replica]

Thanks! Not sure whether I'll write any more, as Luke keeps insisting I write him in present tense all the time (askjfgha present tense = my worst enemy, which rather explains the grammar a bit), but I hope to!

[niffe]

Hm, just some of your words were clashing with the tense you were using

[replica]

Yeah, pretty much everything I write is in past tense, so I have no experience with writing in present. I re-read it several times (because I sat on this for about a week before posting) and tried to catch all the tense mix-ups and such, but, eh >_< There was still some words I wasn't sure about.