"Still Life With" for butterfly_kate

[luna_poster]

Title: Still Life With
Rating: PG-13
Possible Spoilers/Warnings: None
Pairings/Characters: Luna/Dean
Summary: At least with Luna he stands a decent chance of understanding what's going on when she decides to finish a conversation they'd started months ago. He knows her, understands what she means by the angle of her hips or how much she's chewing

Comments

[peskywhistpaw]

Oh, this is so CUTE! I love the way that Luna and Dean interact; it's very natural. The memories, too, seem to flow really well together with the at-the-present bits of the story.

My favorite lines:

He knows her, understands what she means by the angle of her hips or how much she's chewing on her hair as she speaks.

'Oh yes. I think it would be far more simple if I just went naked.'

'I thought, "well, everyone is going to know what I look like naked, and it would really make things much easier if I saved them the trouble of taking off all my clothes in their head to make sure I match." I'm sure it would be less distracting.'

'But you are a proper artist. Don't you always look like one?'

And like Grindylows out of water, I thought, was really particularly clever. :D

Anyway, I love your characterizations, and I think you've captured their relationship quite splendidly. ♥

[attilatehbun]

Thank you so much! Luna/Dean feels very organic to me as a pairing; they always seem to just flow. I'm glad you liked it!

[butterfly_kate]

Okay. Wow. I can't even tell you how much I love this, mystery author! :D

First, I think the Dean PoV works incredibly well here because it's through him that we see Luna, that we see the Luna we all love.

Their relationship here is just brilliant; it appears so natural, completely organic to the characters and the way that (I believe) they respond to one another and the world around them.

You do a brilliant job of creating gorgeous visuals in the piece without getting bogged down by details, which is precisely the style that I love.

Also, the structure works wonderfully; the way that we weave through time just as Luna weaves through the room ... well it all fits together just perfectly.

Now, some favourite parts:

He knows her, understands what she means by the angle of her hips or how much she's chewing on her hair as she speaks.

This is precisely the sort of visual I mean: so simple yet so clear.

He looks at her instead. She takes his arm and hugs it, smiling to herself. He pulls her closer to him and thinks that it doesn

[attilatehbun]

*glomps you*

Heehee. ♥ ♥ ♥

[i_am_girlfriday]

Beautiful. I don't know where to begin!

I think their relationship is summed up best with,

Dean finds it far beyond silly to call her a muse; she's not and never has been, not in that way. But he finds that the more he watches her, the more she creeps into everything he does.

So so so wonderful.

[attilatehbun]

Thank you! ♥ Luna tends to just creep up on you, doesn't she?

[humbuggirl]

This was really adorable and very well constructed. Nice work.

[attilatehbun]

I'm glad you liked it! XD

[kcstories]

Beautifully written. I love how it all flows together. Their characterisations are spot-on too.

Wonderful job! :)

[attilatehbun]

Thank you so much. Luna and Dean are just so much fun to write. :)