Comments | lucathia_rykatu: [Bakuman] fic: Shadows of Truth

lucathia_rykatu

[Bakuman] fic: Shadows of Truth

Feb 19, 2009 16:17

Title: Shadows of Truth
Day/Theme: 04 our memories hint at a shadow of the truth
Series: Bakuman
Character/Pairing: Takagi, Iwase, Mashiro, Azuki, Miyoshi
Rating: PG
Words: ~1400
Notes: for 31_days_exchnge, which are all due TODAY. This takes into consideration canon up to chapter 25 only. This is a look at one of their possible futures from Takagi's side.

( Bakuman, xx years later, Takagi's side )

fic: shadows of truth, bakuman, writing community: 31_days, fic type: oneshots

Comments 10

revenus February 20 2009, 00:50:24 UTC

OOOOOOH I've been anticipating this! hahaha.

It made me smile to see that you put Iwase in this. She's sort of a contrast for what Shujin could have had, which I found pretty intriguing. Poor guy ends up lonely in this though, eh? XD

lucathia_rykatu February 22 2009, 09:29:43 UTC

Yeah, poor Shujin ended up lonely in this! The most recent chapter makes me think otherwise though.

I think Iwase could have been a pretty interesting character, but too bad she doesn't seem necessary any longer.

viola_canina February 22 2009, 09:45:40 UTC

This is really nice! And I'm glad that Iwase is in this, too, she deserves more attention. ^^

lucathia_rykatu February 22 2009, 12:42:05 UTC

Thanks for reading. :)

danbi February 22 2009, 12:10:02 UTC

I think this fic had a lot of good parts to it, and the characterisation was well-done. But for some reason that I'm having trouble pinpointing, it felt a little flat in comparison to the one you did with Mashiro. I wish I had a clearer way of putting it so that this would actually have the potential to be a helpful comment instead of a vague one; you're completely free to ignore this comment in its entirety, honestly. It's just that I said in my other comment that I was going to read this one too, and didn't want it to seem like I'd skipped out on it.

/awkward comment

lucathia_rykatu February 22 2009, 12:41:43 UTC

Hm, well, Mashiro's side focuses mostly on Mashiro and Takagi and where they end up, while I kind of tried to fill in the futures of other characters with Takagi's side. Iwase's part turned out much longer than expected when it should have been short like Azuki's part in the other one (since she's not supposed to be the focus). Takagi doesn't get to think about his partnership with Mashiro here all that much.

Not awkward at all. I very much appreciate the comment. <3

danbi February 22 2009, 12:55:50 UTC

The part with Iwase was enjoyable. Also, I just wanted to say, thanks for being gracious in your reply!

Aha, journal mix-up. Just ignore that.

lucathia_rykatu March 1 2009, 05:06:04 UTC

Oh my, I just reread this today and realized that the other one is in present tense and this one is in past tense. I should have stuck to one. Maybe you like present tense better? :3 I think I'll rewrite this one a bit to make it match.

kouji_mustang February 22 2009, 22:16:19 UTC

Wowwie, that's really nice!!~
I completely forgot about Iwase until you mentioned her, ahahaha~
But it was a cute story. I like how you interpreted Shujin/Miyoshi's relationship.

lucathia_rykatu February 23 2009, 02:06:54 UTC

Poor forgotten Iwase! Miyoshi wasn't even in this, but Shujin thought about her a lot, yeah?