If Only May Come Someday
I have a timer on the work computer (as well as the home computer.) I work for 55 minutes, then I'm supposed to take a 5 minute break. I recently made myself a standing desk for doing the day job (nothing fancy -- a bunch of books on one of my end tables.) Instead of taking a break for 5 minutes, I've been using the 55 minute limit as an indicator when I should stand up. I'm building up to standing up all day -- right now I'm only doing half the day.
But. I really need to actually take those 5 minutes off, away from the computer and the day job and give myself a real break. No wonder I've felt so tired, and burned out.
I've reached chapter seven. One of the problems is that the Derik/Dagna character is passive through much of the middle of the book.
While taking my 5 minute break and thinking about these things last night (when I couldn't sleep) I finally hit on a good solution, a change to the emotional arc of the chapter. (Plot points kind of fixed.)
1) Dagna and Omma should have dialogue. Just them. And Dagna needs to express being both pissed off that Omma had taken Amalind away, as well as in mourning.
2) Next scene needs to be Jorg and Dagna, and needs to include the information about possibly forcing Omma out of Amalind's body, as the one Witch was (pull from Chapter 9.)
3) Dagna decides to steal the harp, and use it against Omma. Can't do it during the battle, or while she's asleep, afterward.
4) Last scene has to be Dagna trying to steal the harp from Omma. Omma about to kill her, and the White Witch saving her. This is why the WW continues to travel with them for a while.
All the plot points remain, but the emotional thrust is completely different. And Dagna's *active*. And gives both Yuri and Omma a reason not to trust her, while the White Witch tries to use her influence on her later.
Now, back to the day job. *sigh*
But. I really need to actually take those 5 minutes off, away from the computer and the day job and give myself a real break. No wonder I've felt so tired, and burned out.
I've reached chapter seven. One of the problems is that the Derik/Dagna character is passive through much of the middle of the book.
While taking my 5 minute break and thinking about these things last night (when I couldn't sleep) I finally hit on a good solution, a change to the emotional arc of the chapter. (Plot points kind of fixed.)
1) Dagna and Omma should have dialogue. Just them. And Dagna needs to express being both pissed off that Omma had taken Amalind away, as well as in mourning.
2) Next scene needs to be Jorg and Dagna, and needs to include the information about possibly forcing Omma out of Amalind's body, as the one Witch was (pull from Chapter 9.)
3) Dagna decides to steal the harp, and use it against Omma. Can't do it during the battle, or while she's asleep, afterward.
4) Last scene has to be Dagna trying to steal the harp from Omma. Omma about to kill her, and the White Witch saving her. This is why the WW continues to travel with them for a while.
All the plot points remain, but the emotional thrust is completely different. And Dagna's *active*. And gives both Yuri and Omma a reason not to trust her, while the White Witch tries to use her influence on her later.
Now, back to the day job. *sigh*