misswinterhill: Collective Noun: Pride (PG-13)

[misswinterhill]

Title: Collective Noun: Pride

Comments

[seether_79]

Really beautiful! :)

[misswinterhill]

Thanks very much :)

[doctor_addicted]

"Lionesses do the hunting for their pride. Lionesses hunt as a co-ordinated group and are smaller, swifter, and more agile than males. They are not encumbered by the heavy and conspicuous mane which causes overheating during exertion."

Gosh, I so loved how you weaved the lions' characteristics and the Torchwood behaviour together!Brilliant.“I like it when you touch me,” said Ianto, breathing in the scent of sun and washing powder and Jack on his clean sheets. And then there's a good portion of nice and quiet humour to make up for previous angst:

“I like touching you. We could come to some sort of arrangement about this [...]I touch you, you purr at me, and then I touch you some more.”

I'd say you have successfully risen to the challenge :) Thanks for sharing.

[misswinterhill]

Such a great comment :-) Thanks! I haven't really written for challenges until recently, so I'm glad you think I got there. When I got the idea I looked up lions on Wikipedia and went "Oh my gosh. This is perfect!" and hence fic.

[thrace_adams]

Oh I really loved this! What a brilliant analogy! I can totally see Jack as the lion with the Mane swishing his great coat everywhere and looking magnificent, Gwen as the lioness protecting and hunting...and Ianto as the one that keeps them happy and together. And I loved when Jack said he'd call the Doctor. What a great story!!!!

[misswinterhill]

Thanks! I thought Jack made a good lion. And I'm glad the different roles were very clear, I'd worried a bit about that when I was writing it, if it actually made sense anywhere outside my own brain and my own little world. Thanks for the comment!

[queerlyobscure]

I love the way you've written that - Jack as the lion looking after his pride

I am highly impressed, a remarkable piece of writing. *mems*

[misswinterhill]

Thanks very much! I have only just worked out what mems means, and I'm totally flattered :-)

[woodencoyote]

I really appreciate this fic. You successfully convey the sense that Jack is damaged by his ordeal in Exit Wounds without turning him into a gibbering wreck or a parody. It feels really true to the show. Bonus points for pterodactyl reference.

[misswinterhill]

Thanks for such a thoughtful comment! Means a lot to know the specific bits I got down okay :)

I liked the idea of Ianto mentioning totally normal things to him that just *sounded* delirious and weird.

I was thinking about the post Exit Wounds Jack... I've read (and written) a lot of fics where he doesn't want to be enclosed, but the thought suddenly struck me that it would probably be the opposite (hence the reference to the dirt here). After that long underground, people and space would freak the hell out of me, at least...