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Ficlet: Certainty

Mar 20, 2011 15:39

Title: Certainty
Prompt: Submitted for first-person/family at sm_monthly .
A/N: Rated R because of some very filthy language. Also, look at the new, shiny shiny icon! Cate made it for me, it’s the new designated angst icon. *claps* So, in honour of the icon, here we go.

( Enjoy. )

fandom: sailor moon, character: jadeite

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venusorbit1 March 21 2011, 03:11:21 UTC

In so few words, I love this kid, I hope he shoots the hell out of Beryl, and somehow gets to live, but I'm sure that's not the case. Way to knock one out of the park with the first person narration, too!

I’m a great many of things (my father would say I’m nothing, but he and I never saw eye-to-eye, so who cares?).

UGH ;___; HIDDEN ANGST. WHAT. This makes me feel even worse for him.

Neat way to blend Rei morphing into Beryl. For a damn minute I thought he was going to shoot Rei and that would be even more ;___;

What? You think this is unfair? Oh, me too. Spare me the eulogy, I have no interest in that sort of thing. You don’t know me well enough to make it count anyway.

Awesome, powerful lines. You can gather everything about his character just from this part.

lovelylytton March 21 2011, 08:49:00 UTC

In so few words, I love this kid, I hope he shoots the hell out of Beryl, and somehow gets to live, but I'm sure that's not the case. Way to knock one out of the park with the first person narration, too!
... Well, it's not Beryl he's pointing the gun at. *ducks*

I don't usually like to write in first person, but it's different when it's any version of Jadeite because he's so raw and there's a lot to play with. (I wanted to do a pre-whodunnit drabble at first, but it didn't work.)

UGH ;___; HIDDEN ANGST. WHAT. This makes me feel even worse for him.
Me too. :( The whole thing about cutting down the tree was a not so subtle dig at his father, who didn't mind that his kid got hurt, which I find really sad. SAD.

Awesome, powerful lines. You can gather everything about his character just from this part.
Other than the first line, this one is my favourite too. He's so, so angry, and so honest.

WHAT venusorbit1 March 22 2011, 06:25:53 UTC

WAIT IT'S NOT???????? WHAT IS GOING ON??????????????

AND HIS FATHER SUCKS SO HARD. EFF THAT GUY.

Re: WHAT lovelylytton March 22 2011, 09:19:01 UTC

"In my hand, the gun feels heavy. I lift it to my head and smile. Told ya. Never out of choices."

It's suicide. He'd rather kill himself than he become a puppet in her hands.

Re: WHAT venusorbit1 March 22 2011, 18:46:56 UTC

OMG. WHAT IS IT WITH YOU AND SPIRIT AND THE SUICIDES!!! I'm obviously not a grad student, since I didn't pick up on that line after reading it 5+ times.

I want to hug this guy. NOOOO.

I'M EMO NOW.

Re: WHAT lovelylytton March 27 2011, 12:24:03 UTC

I'M EMO NOW.
Think of the happy fic that is soon coming your way. Feel better? (Also, think of more things you'd like me to stick in.)

Re: WHAT venusorbit1 March 22 2011, 18:47:19 UTC

OH GOD HE DOES IT IN PUBLIC.

HIS DAD....they will never make amends!

;_____;

Re: WHAT lovelylytton March 27 2011, 12:23:09 UTC

Honestly, his father was a dick, so not making amends is kind of okay. But still :( for Jirou.

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