I'm a little reluctant to say that English is, in fact, my first language. What is it in particular that made you think otherwise?
As I mentioned, I wrote this a few years ago as a short story horror piece. The tone is set from the omniscient third person point of view with a deranged serial killer as the narrator. He believes he understands her actions, which is why the point of view seems to shift. The short sentences and changing of tone represent his mind frame as unstable and involved in the moment.
I chose a very artistic piece for this submission, and perhaps that was my downfall. I wrote this story to tell the tale of a man who collected eyeballs from his victims then tossed them away like broken dolls. I told this story to get inside his head and see how he could find a pair of eyes so interesting, but the case that held them so flawed. I wrote quite a few short stories like this for a while and had honestly thought I was putting a new spin on them.
Once again, thank you for reading my submission and for voting, even if it was against me. I’m very critical of my own work, so I honestly expected it. If I’m rejected on this try I think I might have to write something new instead of submitting what I thought was tried-and-true work like this. Thank you for your honest input!
I'm a little reluctant to say that English is, in fact, my first language. What is it in particular that made you think otherwise?
As I mentioned, I wrote this a few years ago as a short story horror piece. The tone is set from the omniscient third person point of view with a deranged serial killer as the narrator. He believes he understands her actions, which is why the point of view seems to shift. The short sentences and changing of tone represent his mind frame as unstable and involved in the moment.
I chose a very artistic piece for this submission, and perhaps that was my downfall. I wrote this story to tell the tale of a man who collected eyeballs from his victims then tossed them away like broken dolls. I told this story to get inside his head and see how he could find a pair of eyes so interesting, but the case that held them so flawed. I wrote quite a few short stories like this for a while and had honestly thought I was putting a new spin on them.
Once again, thank you for reading my submission and for voting, even if it was against me. I’m very critical of my own work, so I honestly expected it. If I’m rejected on this try I think I might have to write something new instead of submitting what I thought was tried-and-true work like this. Thank you for your honest input!
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