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Red Handed- leoness8178

Dec 07, 2005 03:10

Title: Red Handed
Author: leoness8178
Pairing/Character: Logan/Veronica
Rating: Adult/NC-17
Word Count: 7,632
Summary: “Great, this is just what I needed. Here I was, all ready to take my test and now...this. How am I going to explain the blush and puffy lips to my boyfriend? Thanks a lot, Logan.” She pushed away from him and started to reapply her ( Read more... )

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Comments 11

firefly2000 December 7 2005, 08:14:02 UTC

I heart you and your fic. Logan is so hot...Mmmm
The bathroom scene was awesome...oh hell the whole thing was awesome.

leoness8178 December 7 2005, 15:53:53 UTC

I heart you too! Thanks!!!

burymyregret December 7 2005, 09:53:12 UTC

That was hotness! I loved the fluffy goodness! Great job!

leoness8178 December 7 2005, 15:55:04 UTC

Hotness + Fluffy Goodness= A very heart-felt 'Thank you' from me to you

itsthedetails December 8 2005, 06:27:41 UTC

Hot hot Hot!!! And while I enjoy the sex, especially hot tub sex, the bathroom scene with Veronica helping Logan jerk off is just sexy.

Ah my eyes... they burn.

Hahahaha, poor Wallace.

leoness8178 December 8 2005, 21:20:41 UTC

Glad that you liked! The temp in my apartment shot up when I wrote that first scene in the bathroom. Gotta love Wallace! Thanks for the kind words.

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leoness8178 December 12 2005, 22:44:10 UTC

Welcome to the LoVe ship!!! I'm really glad that you liked it! I love LoVe in the bathroom and library too! I love Wallace walking in on them too.

truemyth December 25 2005, 09:40:08 UTC

I enjoyed how many times you managed to have Veronica and Logan interrupted during the course of the story. At the end, I was waiting for someone to walk into the hottub scene even. You have a lot going on here. I had figured out by the second mention that Logan was actually Veronica's boyfriend and the joke started to wear on me after a while, so I think you might have overplayed your hand with that bit.

They were extremely sweet with each other, especially at the end, and sometimes it's just nice to read a sweet, smutty fic.

I was a bit confused with the logistics of some of the actions.
"Logan, lowering her back to the floor, quipped, “And where am I going to go? Out the window?"
Back to the floor? You didn't have me picturing them on the floor earlier.
Also, in the bathroom, you have Logan's knees buckle, but then he's pulling Veronica to him and bending to kiss her, which implies that he's still standing.

I found some of your sexual terms a bit too clinical for my personal enjoyment. "Cervix bumping" is a turn off for me.