Waiting. (Challenge 12 for bsg_100 - "family")

[lotus79]

Title: Waiting
Author: lotus79
Characters: Kara, mentions of Lee and Zak.
Spoilers: none, set pre-series.
Rating: all ages
Word Count: 100
Author's note: This was actually a bit I wrote for a flashback in my fic Schisms, but I am not sure it will fit.  And I quite like it as a drabble.  It can stand alone, but if you have read the fic it will have extra

Comments

[stardust_20]

I'm not sure I'm understanding correctly.

He’s in there-her son
Lee’s son too, but she tries not to think about that anymore.

Does that mean she's pregnant with Lee's child or Zak's? And who is carrying Lee's son if not her? Are you referring to Gianne?

[lotus79]

No there's one mother and one child - she's referring to the fact that her son is also Lee's. She doesn't think of it that way because Lee rejected them both. (This is actually Schisms backstory - the baby is Sebastian)

*edits to try and make it clearer*

[stardust_20]

Sorry, it was just very unclear. I think you have to read Schisms to understand and although I have read parts of it, I still didn't get it!

I thought you meant Lee was dead, not gone as in left them.

[lotus79]

I did mention it in the author note. But I also wanted it to make sense without (which is difficult of course, because the fic lives in my head like a parasite) so thanks for pointing it out.

I did want Lee's whereabouts to be ambiguous (the comparison to Zak is deliberate - Lee is as good as dead to her at this point) but not the fact that it's his baby. I reworded it slightly - is it better now, or would you suggest anything else?

Obviously knowledge of Schisms gives it deeper meaning. But I was going for "ambiguous" rather than "confusing" otherwise.

[artemis_90]

Great backstory!

But it works also without knowing about little Seb! The bit of Lee CAN be read as bit ambigious but that's okay - it can be a drabble to hook us in to Schisms!

[lotus79]

Thanks! I'm glad I put it up separately now, I think. Not sure it will make it into a flashback, but it's definitely a snapshot of the past-Kara I envisioned for it.