Thank you:) I'm more nervous about this story than the others I've posted, because it's been so hard to write. My brain hasn't wanted to cooperate. I'm glad you enjoyed it:)
As for your need for a Beta... I don't see that you need one! Unless I was so enraptured by your tale I was blinded to any errors - I'd say your story was near perfect! You've got the characters down (especially Zed) and I didn't see any grammar issues.
I'm not so worried about grammar/spelling stuff (I'm what you might call a grammar nazi :P), but more I just don't know if some things sound awkward, or if things flow right. I'm hypercritical of my own work (which is funny, because I'll read almost anything), so I tend to see things being glaringly wrong or awkward when maybe they're not so much.
I am glad you enjoyed it :) I should have the next part posted in the next few days, as soon as I finish part 3.
Ooh, well done. I appreciate anything that tackles Kahlan's head right before the Spell of Undoing - she was being so maddeningly stoic on the show, and we all know more was going on beneath it. ;) Good to get a version of what, exactly.
This is an intriguing start. Great characterizations. And I like that you made Richard's "Let's stay lost and have babies and repopulate the world, it might be the Creator's plan!" speech the thing that made Kahlan back off emotionally. Cause, yeah, K, it skeeved me too! LOL
Well, we know she's got that whole "confessor face" thing as a defense mechanism, right? ;) Clearly that means she was having more ~feelings than usual.
LOL, yeah. That whole "repopulate the world" thing was....creepy, to say the very least. I'm pretty sure it was Richard being desperate, 'cause he felt that Kahlan was slipping away. At least, that's the way I justify it in my head, 'cause I want to like Richard, not be totally skeeved by him.
Glad you liked it:) More should be up soon; maybe even later on today, but no promises.
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As for your need for a Beta... I don't see that you need one! Unless I was so enraptured by your tale I was blinded to any errors - I'd say your story was near perfect! You've got the characters down (especially Zed) and I didn't see any grammar issues.
I can't wait to read more!
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I'm not so worried about grammar/spelling stuff (I'm what you might call a grammar nazi :P), but more I just don't know if some things sound awkward, or if things flow right. I'm hypercritical of my own work (which is funny, because I'll read almost anything), so I tend to see things being glaringly wrong or awkward when maybe they're not so much.
I am glad you enjoyed it :) I should have the next part posted in the next few days, as soon as I finish part 3.
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Ooh, well done. I appreciate anything that tackles Kahlan's head right before the Spell of Undoing - she was being so maddeningly stoic on the show, and we all know more was going on beneath it. ;) Good to get a version of what, exactly.
This is an intriguing start. Great characterizations. And I like that you made Richard's "Let's stay lost and have babies and repopulate the world, it might be the Creator's plan!" speech the thing that made Kahlan back off emotionally. Cause, yeah, K, it skeeved me too! LOL
Looking forward to more!
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LOL, yeah. That whole "repopulate the world" thing was....creepy, to say the very least. I'm pretty sure it was Richard being desperate, 'cause he felt that Kahlan was slipping away. At least, that's the way I justify it in my head, 'cause I want to like Richard, not be totally skeeved by him.
Glad you liked it:) More should be up soon; maybe even later on today, but no promises.
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