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listen to the words long written down, richard/jacob, richard/alex, pg13 (scavenge, trustworthy) crickets May 23 2009, 02:14:13 UTC
PART ONE
listen to the words long written down
richard/jacob, richard/alex, pg 13
[It's too long because I obviously can't follow direactions.]

Jacob’s not entirely wrong about people.

Still, it doesn’t change the fact that in the worst of times, they are overrun; having to forage for sustenance, the sea emptied of its once fruitful harvest, and by the end, the ground at their feet is soaked with blood.

“We will be reborn,” Jacob assures at these moments.

Richard nods, believes, watches the others clean up the carnage, and tries to remember his own birth, his mother, a life before this one ( ... )

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PART TWO crickets May 23 2009, 02:14:45 UTC

By the time Dharma comes and goes again, this is all a distant memory.

The ascension of a man named Ben is the second time Richard doubts. He scares Richard, his defiance, his need to rule. And Richard wants to seek out Jacob, to ask him why, why such a leader? But then he remembers his promise.

Always.

--

There’s a small explosion one day, a simple accident, and Alex - once an unwanted infant, now a tolerated young woman - arrives first.

She wants to help, but the team is beyond it and Richard knows it. He watches her at first, still and silent. Then, he grabs her by the shoulders, pulls her away, whispers in her ear.

“There’s nothing to be done.”

--

Days later, she confronts him on the path.

“Why are you like that?”

“Like what?”

“Like…” Alex struggles for the words, “not human.”

I’m human, Richard wants to say, but at once he realizes she’s right. He exists on another plane, one with Jacob and the terrible burden he carries. Here, he is disengaged, apart. No. He’s not human anymore ( ... )

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Re: PART TWO gigglemonster May 23 2009, 02:20:58 UTC
Guh I seriously LOVE this
How he believes so much at the beginning and by the end all he knows is doubt :(
and omgsh richard/jacob YES lol totally
And this line:

I’m human, Richard wants to say, but at once he realizes she’s right. He exists on another plane, one with Jacob and the terrible burden he carries. Here, he is disengaged, apart. No. He’s not human anymore.

Aww Richard. Especially since Alex made him feel human again! But then she dies and I just feel SO sad for him in this. He's so alone.
But the gorgeous, awesome fic kind of alone ;)

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 23 2009, 02:34:23 UTC
Pretty icon! ;)

Thank you so much! I'm glad you're into this. Also "gorgeous, awesome fic kind of alone" made me giggle.

Look! I wroted!

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Re: PART TWO slybrunette May 23 2009, 02:28:05 UTC
Richard's really hard to write. I know this, very, very well, and so I can appreciate to an insane degree what a challenge this must've been. But, dude, SO good. So, so good. And I know I told you that. But still.

Jacob/Richard might just be my new non-canon ship, btw.

And I love all the underlying stuff about how he doesn't act human, doesn't feel human. He's a very stoic, detached character on the show, you know, otherworldly, and I love how you worked that into this.

Wonderful work!

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 23 2009, 02:32:53 UTC
Hee thank you! I think anyone is hard to write at the moment since I haven't in so long.

You have no idea how much I am smiling to hear this right now: Jacob/Richard might just be my new non-canon ship, btw.

I know the word "might's" in there but I am happy nonetheless.

*bouncees*

I'm glad you liked it!

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Re: PART TWO workswithwords May 23 2009, 03:14:53 UTC
HOMG! This was so freaking good! You made me love Richard even more, if that's possible....

I like the idea of Richard/Jacob, I definitely see that as something that could have happened. Also I love that you addressed Richard's doubt!

EXCELLENT!

also I fail for not having a Richard icon...lol

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 23 2009, 03:26:34 UTC
Really? Even more? Heheh. That's definitely saying something.

Thank you so much!

And nawww... you don't fail. You can get one some day!

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Re: PART TWO demonqueen666 May 23 2009, 05:44:15 UTC
I’m human, Richard wants to say, but at once he realizes she’s right. He exists on another plane, one with Jacob and the terrible burden he carries. Here, he is disengaged, apart. No. He’s not human anymore.

...Dude. That's...wow. I'm so totally beyond words for this. It's, um, really really good.

(Maybe I could comment smarter if it wasn't one in the morning.)

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 23 2009, 13:32:16 UTC
Well I forgive you. Thank you so much. I'm really really happy you think so. ;)

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Re: PART TWO angeldylan628 May 23 2009, 18:01:20 UTC
Oh gosh this is beautiful! It's so nice to see some Jacob/Richard fics starting to surface now! I love this concept. I love your version of Jacob. It's very three dimensional, and I enjoyed how you explored the complexities of the relationship between the two men and how you used Alex to make that apparent.

Seriously, this is amazing.

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 24 2009, 04:58:23 UTC
Yeah, I agree. I'm really starting to get into the idea of this pairing. I hope to write more of them soon! I really wanted to give something to Richard that would make him doubt completely, and I love the pairing of Alex/Richard so it just seemed to fit. (Not to mention that feels to me like one of the most unjust and painful - yet abrupt - deaths on the show.)

Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely feedback!

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Re: PART TWO zelda_zee May 23 2009, 21:24:48 UTC
Ooh, this gave me chills. It's quite marvelous. I loved it.

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 24 2009, 04:58:47 UTC
Wow thank you so much! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Re: PART TWO metatarsus May 28 2009, 23:13:29 UTC
/stalked over here from your comment on my fanmix

This is ALL KINDS OF BRILLIANT, ugh, omg. This kind of a relationship is so hard to write and you pulled it off fantastically. Love love love the idea that Richard loses some of his "humanity" as he doesn't age, and Alex bringing him back to that is so great.

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Re: PART TWO crickets May 28 2009, 23:22:17 UTC
Hee! Thank you! And that was a lovely mix! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Richard is so fascinating and the element of Jacob just makes it that much more interesting. :D

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