Fic: UNIT: Double Cross

[lost_spook]

Story: UNIT: Double Cross
Author:lost_spook
Rating: All ages
Characters/Pairings: Dr Webber, Tilly Holmes, Sergeant Kennedy, Captain Evered, (plus a Special Guest Appearance in the Epilogue)
Warnings: Absence of DW characters? Some possible cuteness in the Epilogue? None, really.

Summary: May 1987: Colonel Crichton has retired, his replacement’s

Comments

[persiflage_1]

What's Nat up to now?

Couple of beta-ish comments:

Ch 1

By the time Captain Evered arrived in the lab about an hour an a half later, misgivings had turned to trouble of various sorts.

"and" not "an"

Ch 2

And if I talk to people they’re much more likely to respond than they will with someone who’s poking a gun in their faces.

"to me" after "respond" and "would" rather than "will"

[lost_spook]

Thanks. I'll go off and fix the first; might leave the second, as it's Kate speaking and I think she might not tend to be grammatical...

What do you mean, what's Nat up to? Somebody's done something dreadful to him, as always! ;-D

[persiflage_1]

Heh, okay. I did consider that about the second one, but mentioned it anyway...

What do you mean, what's Nat up to? Somebody's done something dreadful to him, as always! ;-D

I don't know! Trouble seems to follow him around worse than it does the Doctor!

[lost_spook]

Oh, no, I'd rather you pointed out my mistakes, or potential mistakes!

That's because he has the misfortune to be a lost_spook OC. They never have uneventful lives. He's lucky he's only in fanfic. :lol:

[persiflage_1]

Okay then...

True - he is lucky!