MY NEW SONG
this is my newest song i just wrote. i havent edited it yet, its still in the works. i just wanted to post it so if i lose it i will know i have it on my journal. and i also wanted to get some pointers. so anyone who can write good PLEASE HELP ME WITH THIS SONG!!!!
giving the people the right,
to kill at will
to prove how big ther are
to be working for the army
chours
kill at will
thats all you have to do
get what you can
so we can kill again
using their gun to defeat
killing the young and the poor
there bombs on their side
just in case they run away
chours
change the new world order,
by making violence a lost cause
this is inhuman,
to do this to a poor country
so give me some pointers. this song goes to the to the music very well, but i know it needs some work, i just dont know. so please help me.
giving the people the right,
to kill at will
to prove how big ther are
to be working for the army
chours
kill at will
thats all you have to do
get what you can
so we can kill again
using their gun to defeat
killing the young and the poor
there bombs on their side
just in case they run away
chours
change the new world order,
by making violence a lost cause
this is inhuman,
to do this to a poor country
so give me some pointers. this song goes to the to the music very well, but i know it needs some work, i just dont know. so please help me.