Obscure & British Commentfest 2016

May 07, 2016 09:18

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Fire and Ice spikesgirl58 May 17 2016, 13:32:17 UTC
Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice.
Robert Frost

They stood on the edge of the cliff and watched the fire as it tore through the woods, a fire that they had, in fact, been responsible for. A fire that, in the end, would cost one man his life, a life that needed to be sacrificed so that Time could continue on it predestined path.

A tear trickled down Sapphire’s cheek as she mourned for all of those not of the human species that would also perish. They’d done their best to clear the area, but she knew it was not enough.

“It’s never enough,” she muttered bitterly and wiped her cheek with the back of her hand.

Steel turned. He knew better than to make light of her grief. It was one of her strengths. He didn’t understand it as such, but he didn’t need to understand to know. It made him a better agent because she tempered his decisions.

“I know, but there was no option. He has to die.”

“Not that, entirely. This destruction. It will take years for the land to recovery.”

“Some people would argue that this is what nature does in order to rejuvenate life.”

“It’s harsh and absolute.”

Abruptly they were standing on an ice cliff with nothing but the blue white of snow surrounding them. Sapphire looked at Steel, surprise clouding her features.

“More harsh and absolute than this?” Steel gestured to the horizon even as the snow swirled around them. “Here the temperatures fall to well below freezing, making survival a daily triumph at best. Here you cannot out run the blaze, you cannot escape the clutches of the cold and the ice. Yet, even here it creates and gives life.”

Sapphire wrapped her arms about her, although they felt neither cold nor heat. “It’s brutal, yes, but life does survive.”

They were suddenly in a glade. Obviously a fire had raged through the area at some point, but new plants poked out from beneath the ashes and fire debris. Not far away, a rabbit hopped a few feet to nibble on some grass.

“As you say, life does survive.” Then they were back on the cliff, a chill wind swirling around them. There was a rumble of thunder and the rain started to cool the blaze. “He is gone, the rest will be saved now.”

“Is Time really that important that a man’s life means nothing?”

“Yes.” Steel sighed. “It is everything. It is why we are here and why we must be strong.”

“Do you fear fire, Steel?”

Steel smiled and shook his head. “I was forged in great heat. It holds no terror for me.”

“And you can drop your core to absolute zero, meaning ice holds no fear for you, either. What are you afraid of, Steel?”

He caught her hand and kissed her fingers lightly. “Losing you and of what my existence would be without you to remind me of humanity.”

Below the fire petered out and the rain continued until there was nothing but some smoldering ash behind. The news reports would praise the timing of the storm and lament that, although a single life had been lost, it was fortunate that the destruction wasn’t worse. Those listening to the news would never know that it wasn’t luck as much as it was a handful of Elements making sure that the rest of the world had time enough to spare.

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timelessapeel May 17 2016, 14:27:41 UTC
Beautiful and poignant. Sapphire and Steel are always at their best when a little humanity sneaks in to temper the harsh realities of what they have to do. Great work!

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spikesgirl58 May 17 2016, 16:24:06 UTC
Thank you so much. You are very kind! I do think that Sapphire injects a bit more humanity into Steel - who can usually use it.

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timelessapeel May 17 2016, 17:20:29 UTC
Sapphire is undoubtedly Steel's more emotional counterweight--I suspect it's not coincidence that they were paired together. Him being on his own would likely be less than ideal...

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spikesgirl58 May 17 2016, 20:29:54 UTC
I totally agree. She is his ying and he keeps her for crumbling at times when the answer is less than pleasant. This is why they make such a good team.

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timelessapeel May 22 2016, 22:40:45 UTC
Absolutely! I shudder to think how some situations would have turned out otherwise.

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spikesgirl58 May 23 2016, 13:04:01 UTC
It would indeed be grim for us.

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Re: Fire and Ice a_boleyn May 17 2016, 18:06:13 UTC
Very sad ... made me think of the current Ft. McMurray fires.

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Re: Fire and Ice spikesgirl58 May 17 2016, 20:33:16 UTC
I'm sorry, I didn't mean to make you sad. *hugs*

And thanks for reading.

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Re: Fire and Ice a_boleyn May 17 2016, 21:33:45 UTC
The story was a sad one thanks to being well written ... didn't make ME sad. Thank you for your concern. :)

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Re: Fire and Ice spikesgirl58 May 18 2016, 12:00:08 UTC
Okay, I feel better now. I didn't mean to bring bad feelings to the surface with it. Thank you!

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Re: Fire and Ice ragnarok_08 May 17 2016, 20:12:53 UTC
This is just fantastic <33

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Re: Fire and Ice emeraldarrows May 17 2016, 22:56:22 UTC
Beautiful and heart-breakingly perfect. Thank you sooo much. <333

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Re: Fire and Ice spikesgirl58 May 18 2016, 14:50:41 UTC
You are so very welcome - thank you for being patient! and I'm delighted that you enjoyed it.

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Re: Fire and Ice lost_spook May 18 2016, 16:48:16 UTC
Ah, excellent! Very good, very chilling - very S&S!

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Re: Fire and Ice spikesgirl58 May 18 2016, 17:19:49 UTC
Thank you so much for that! I really appreciate the kind words! :D

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