Omniocular July Challenge Entry

[lorelei_lynn]

I'm submitting this for the July Challenge at omniocular - Brothers and Sisters

Title: The Importance of Being Earnest
Main Characters: Ernie Macmillan, Cathy Macmillan
Summary: During his fifth year at Hogwarts, Ernie Macmillan wrestles with his conscience while dealing with an embarrassing nickname, a questionable Muggle artifact, and Hufflepuffs behaving

Comments

[lisa_ab]

I really enjoyed this.

It's kind of neat really, your vision of Ernie fits so well with the one I have built for him as well. I know we don't actually know him very well from what JKR has given us, but this just seems to fit him so well.

[lazy_neutrino]

That was lovely. A really enjoyable look inside the head (and heart) of a minor character. I particularly enjoyed Umbridge's lesson!

[lightpoint]

That was quite a nice read! This is very much the Ernest :) of the books, but you've given him an excellent measure of substance so that he can stand very well on his own (Hufflepuff love!). Nice work!

[alexandramuses]

*grins* That was sweet, and made me feel all good and warm inside!

A bit of criticism: the beginning seemed kind of chunky, like you weren't sure exactly where the story was going; however, when it finally figured out exactly what the conflict would be, it was much smoother.