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[lordminkie]

Just gonna post some images. I'll have more to say at some later date.

First one is something I did for my Dad. He and I are both fans of Sci-fi so I tried to conjure some sort of weird building...

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[coccinellidae]

I find that flaws in sonnets are often easier to find when read out loud. In my mind at least, in a good sonnet the rhythm should stay consistent throughout. Maybe have Cody read it to you and see how it sounds?
Also, I would note that reason and ruin do not rhyme, and they probably should.

[lordminkie]

I hear you about the rhythm, there's supposedly a sort of ta-TUM rhythm for iambic pentameter but in my head I can rationalize almost any syllable being stronger than the previous.

also, according to http://www.rhymer.com/ ruin and reason do rhyme, but I agree with you. I'll have to figure out how to restructure those lines.

[cocijo]

Read Shakespeare! :D

I'll read Shakespeare! :o

Aloud! ^_^

Actually, if you haven't already, check out the Henry V speech I posted on my LJ. It's a good reference methinks. Also, ask Stuart when he's over tonight.

[lordminkie]

hee hee hee. that's awesome. I can just imagine us doing a reading. I'm picturing you gesticulating while reading from a book in one hand.

maybe I'll take you up on that.

[cocijo]

Maybe wiki. sonnets? :o

[cocijo]

If I can make only one minor suggestion to you drawing...

Perhaps you could try a different shade of green for the grass on the road? Or, perhaps, a lighter brown to indicate a recently traveled driveway? The green is currently conflicting with the brown, and causing my eyes to hurt.

[lordminkie]

yeah I think the colors are over saturated as well. (I seem to do that a lot with whatever I end up doing.) I think I should just have a drag and drop Adjustment Layer that I use for everything I make in photoshop to tone it down.

also I think the grass on the road needs an outline to feel like it's part of the picture. It's something I obviously added later in the process.

[cocijo]

Right.

One of the problems with the grass is there is no shift in color from the foreground to the midground to the background, which forces the picture to loose a lot of it's depth, and causes it to look out of place.

Grass is usually never green unless its pure or synthetic. It's almost always ranges from blue-green to yellow-green with hints of brown near the ground.

[lordminkie]

well all this useful critique has me inspired to pick it back up again. It's prolly done enough for my Dad, but for myself I think there's still plenty left to do.