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lolafalola

HP/DM: All This And Heaven, Too Ch. 4

Jul 22, 2010 14:49

Story Title: All This and Heaven Too
Rating: Most chapters will be PG/PG-13. Some will be R/NC-17
Warnings: mpreg, language, sugary fluff, with a dash of angst at the beginning and in the middle.
Summary: Harry and Draco are newlyweds… They have a good marriage with a few hiccups…. I suck at summaries. It’ll be fluffy fluff fluff.
Disclaimer: J ( Read more... )

challenge response, h/d, all this and heaven too

Comments 9

filmatleven July 22 2010, 20:08:38 UTC

I LOL'd no less than 3 times. *snickers* Wow. Boys. Idiots. LOL

lolafalola July 22 2010, 20:27:38 UTC

Thanks!

I had a fun time writing this one. Some people's imaginations are too big for their own good.

fauxpersonae007 July 23 2010, 05:16:36 UTC

That ending was so insanely perfectly tender. My favorite scene so far. And everything else here was great, so funny!

lolafalola July 23 2010, 06:19:35 UTC

Thank you!

I"m glad it was funny. It seemed hilarious in my head. Honestly, Draco could give a three-year-old a run for his money in the tantrum department.

thrace_adams July 24 2010, 21:42:20 UTC

OH boys....*shaking head* why so stupid??/ Great chapter :)

lolafalola July 25 2010, 02:13:40 UTC

Thank you!

I thought they were being extremely silly. ... just like boys. :)

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lolafalola August 12 2010, 19:30:51 UTC

This is very fluffy. I didn't think I was capable of it, but it comes rather easily. Hmmm..

Thanks for reading and commenting. Each one of these really make me smile. :D

Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo martinstjohn September 4 2010, 10:49:14 UTC

We interrupt this program with an important message from Daniel Webster:
"Wreak" is a negative connotation for "create" as in "the wild bull wreaked havoc in the china shop." "Adolph Hitler wreaked destruction in Europe during the 3rd and 4th decade of the 20th Century."
"reek" is to have a strong, unpleasant odor. "Fido reeked after his encounter with the skunk." "She reeked of dime store purfume."
Just another little problem your spell check program will only make worse. I'm only telling you because it stands out like a weed in a well-tended garden. Count up 22 paragraphs and fix it, please. Then count down 2 more paragraphs and change pail (he carried a pail of snot to the snotterie) to pale (Her face, at first just ghostly, turned a whiter shade of pale). Were you dictating this?
MARTIN

Re: Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo lolafalola September 4 2010, 15:35:32 UTC

Thank you for the explanations and examples. They help me learn.

I shall go fix these. :)