Comments | lolafalola: Jack's Thoughts, Ch. 25

lolafalola

Jack's Thoughts, Ch. 25

Aug 08, 2009 13:40

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Comments 15

mystressxoxo August 8 2009, 19:31:55 UTC

Ooh! A man scorned. Yes, full circle here. Hurt feelings all around. Goodness gracious! Lover's spat or is it really the end? Ugh! Angst, worry, and unresolved feelings! Had to be done, though. Great update, love! =^;^=

lolafalola August 8 2009, 20:22:08 UTC

Thanks! I'm hoping it gets better as well. :)

mystressxoxo August 8 2009, 20:32:12 UTC

You're good at angst, I tell ya! Is this just fuel for the angry sex they'll eventually have?? Or is that me being very delusional and hopeful at the same time? LOL! Kidding, of course! *whistles* ... *suddenly wants Janto for her birthday* =^;^=

lolafalola August 8 2009, 20:59:58 UTC

Right now, hot Janto is much easier for me to write than cross-dressing Drarry. I'm just in the mood for that after all the drarry drama going on. Hmmm....

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chibigirlflower August 8 2009, 19:51:33 UTC

*pout* both are so hurt and their baby is in danger - let them find him soon

lolafalola August 8 2009, 20:30:37 UTC

Don't worry, it'll be soon. I promise.

gottabefierce August 8 2009, 19:51:38 UTC

Man I hate the angry hump parts of stories. But I guess they gotta happen for things to start moving towards the downhill...hopefully to the down hill. Thank you for the update^_^.

lolafalola August 8 2009, 20:32:01 UTC

I'm glad you like it. I don't like the angry, angst parts either, but I'm always drawn to them like a moth to a flame.

gottabefierce August 8 2009, 20:39:10 UTC

I just try to think of them as a writer does. You have the beginning where boy and boy meet then the angry hump part where something happen and they split...which then ultimately, hopefully, will lead to the good (sometimes) bad ending where everything is somewhat resolved...

lolafalola August 8 2009, 21:01:21 UTC

That's pretty much it!

I have found out two things about a drabble series. One, you can't get too complex on the plot. Two, adverbs really aren't necessary.

chloeanne14x August 8 2009, 21:27:36 UTC

wow. I just hope it gets good for our boys from here on.
But I can totally see where Jack was coming from, and...that line where he was syaing 'How am I supposed to say how I felt then?' was actually rather fluffy angst. I 'aww-ed' at it. I've never 'aww-ed' at angst before.
good job!

Re: lolafalola August 8 2009, 21:47:31 UTC

That's alright. I 'aww-ed' in my head when I wrote it, too. :)

stargazer60 August 8 2009, 21:50:42 UTC

Ouch. Everyone is hurt here....