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FIC: A Lot to Live Up To (Part 9)

Jul 03, 2009 07:16

Comments 22

lorrainemarker July 3 2009, 12:37:55 UTC

Oh this is so painful. There's an ache to the realization that you're being cheated on whether its emotional or physical that you captured perfectly. You also captured Lee and Kara's frustration, not only with the situation, but with themselves.

The relationship between the Dee, Felix, Narcho, and Louis is such a wonderful friendship. It aches to know this follows cannon and how painful the end has to be.

lls_mutant July 5 2009, 03:44:33 UTC

Thanks so much! Yeah, the whole infidelity plotline is tough for me. It's not that it brings back bad memories, but I just have so little sympathy for Lee or Kara, and the show had so much more... Argh.

I know. The ending for these four kills me. I know canon never specified if Noel made it to Earth II or not, but my personal canon says no, so.... ::hugs them all::

brennanspeaks July 3 2009, 19:30:57 UTC

Excellent chapter. I can see why it was difficult to write, but your hard work has definitely paid off. You've mentioned that you don't like retelling canon, but I quite enjoyed what you did with this run of episodes. I particularly liked Dee reflecting that Kara wasn't *nearly* as much of a bitch as Louis :D

It got so ouchy towards the end, but in a good way. I'm looking forward to more!

lls_mutant July 5 2009, 03:43:02 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. :)

And yeah, I couldn't resist that line about Louis being a bitch. One of the things I really wanted to come across in this chapter was that even though Dee and Louis care about each other now and have formed this friendship, they can still really rub each other the wrong way, although there's no vindictiveness like there used to be.

Thanks so much! :)

safenthecity July 4 2009, 23:59:38 UTC

Oh. Oh, ouch. Hoshi overheard that? That makes me mad at those two all over again. And Louis offering to send Felix to Dee is so heartbreaking.

The rescue of Starbuck- I'd nearly forgotten about that. I enjoyed seeing a little of Dee's vindictive side here. I don't remember how much of that is canon and how much is you, but I enjoyed that a lot.

The dynamics of Felix and Louis here, by the way, give a good idea of where they are and provide a good explanation as to why we never saw them together outside the webisodes. I love the way you can do that so well. :)

Oh, and Dee and Sam having a moment? My poor babies. They deserved better. ♥

lls_mutant July 5 2009, 03:41:21 UTC

Thanks so much!

The Starbuck rescue is one of my favorite little sideplots, because Dee really gets her moment in the sun. A lot of her vindictive side there is canon, but I don't blame her one little bit and was rather gleeful writing it.

And thanks on the Felix and Louis part. That was one thing that did work about the tacked on nature of the romance for me. Both Felix and Louis strike me as such private, professional people that it made sense that Tigh never knew about their coupledom, because it makes sense to me they'd consider it unprofessional to let him know. (also, I'm married to, like, the least public man EVER.) Plus, yeah, Louis has some big reasons for kind of guarding it right now, and Felix has the whole Baltar thing....

Thanks so much! :)

rayruz July 5 2009, 11:15:18 UTC

*twitch**double twitch*

Gah, this was a hard chapter to read. Especially as a K/L shipper. Because getting it all from Dee's POV really shows just how wrong, totally wrong it is, meanwhile when I was watching the show I was like "Please make out more because you're both so damned pretty." And I could get into my long spiel about Kara's self-esteem issues but I'm not going to go there now. I'm just going to leave this with- great work. I know you really worked your ass off to get this chapter done.

lls_mutant July 6 2009, 02:23:42 UTC

Thanks!

I know. I mean, I'm not a K/L shipper, but I like Kara and I like Lee. This was just a difficult part of the show. Also, so often in discussions, it seems like Dee and Sam (but more often Dee) get blamed for standing in the way of true love.

I agree- it's not as simple as Kara and Lee being assholes, there are MAJOR issues there. And the next chapter's going to hurt a bit, too, because I have to deal with a few other couples and infidelity. And there's one other issue that won't get addressed in this fic but I now know that is SOOOOOOOOO ouchy. But if it makes you feel better, Lee will redeem himself a bit in the next chapter (I think) as it will go through Taking a Break, and he gets his act back together with regards to Dee then.

But thanks!!! :)

rayruz July 6 2009, 02:26:22 UTC

Dee and Sam don't deserve the blame at all. It's Kara and Lee's and mostly Kara's issues.

kappamaki33 July 6 2009, 02:41:59 UTC

Wow, I feel like not only does Dee need a hug and large quantities of ice cream right about now--*I* need a hug and ice cream. I see why you had a rough time writing this one.

As down in the dumps as everybody was, I did like how you portrayed the Hoshi-Dee-Felix-Narcho dynamic during the low points, like when everyone is starving. They're great friends, but I think you captured the reality of being stuck in a big tin can with great friends under horrendous conditions: sometimes, you're going to snipe at each other. It doesn't mean your not friends; it just means you're all human and have your limits.

"The six month mark." Louis's eyes narrowed. "For a damn good reason." The tone of his voice was so frosty that Dee looked down at her own plate, and Noel even shut his mouth.::gasps:: Oh *no*! Wow, if this means what I think it means... Narcho was a bastard. *Ouch ( ... )

lls_mutant July 6 2009, 10:54:53 UTC

Thanks so much! Yeah, marital infidelity is one of those... eek. I'm wondering if I'll have the guts to take it to Dee's suicide or not.

It doesn't mean your not friends; it just means you're all human and have your limits.

Yup :) I like to think none of them took it remotely seriously, either. That was why I put the little snap about Hoshi waiting for six months after they got the algae... because that's real, not just brought on by hunger and stress.

And yes, Narcho was a bastard, although there's a little more to it than that (but not too much) :)

(By the way, does Lee seriously suspect something between Hoshi and Dee, or his he just parrying Dee's inquiry and sidetracking her there?)About 20% the first, but 80% the second. Lee's not seeing the Felix/Louis relationship much, although if you asked him to think about it, it wouldn't shock him in the least. And Dee has suddenly become very close to Hoshi in a very short time. He IS a little jealous of Hoshi, because Dee talks to him. The part about her not telling him ( ... )