Baby, I want a worm's eye view of you...

[llamabitchyo]

Robert had no doubt that Ianto knew Jack flirted with everything that moved--you couldn't breathe within a hundred meters of the guy without getting hit on. But flirting and openly propositioning a perspective employee for sex were two different things.Mmm, mmm. Nothing like a little hot'n'heavy, one-on-one point perspective. Though... I wonder

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[llamabitchyo]

It is a correct usage, but I think averted would have been a better choice... though averted is used with an object, so the sentence would need to be re-written more actively, which I'm always a fan of, with Ianto averting his eyes. I don't like it when gazes and eyes and other random body parts start doing stuff on their own. Once in a while it's okay, but in fanfic when there are so many other weird grammar and punctuation things going on...

No one with any sense of perspective is ever going to get a job at Torchwood. Over-the-top insanity is probably a selection criteria on the application form.

So, so true. It was an odd fic in one way, because it was about job interviews to fill Tosh and Owen's positions and the two doctors who were the final candidates, well, I don't think either of them were right for the Torchwood craziness. I thought the author took the easy route by making one an obnoxious bigot. In reality (as real as TW is...), I think Jack would have kept looking, would have rather picked up a random doctor off the street if he had too.

It was also an odd fic because the writing wasn't that great, but it had laugh-out-loud moments and also some character insights that I thought were amazing. I am so biased, when people write poorly or don't proof-read well, I think they're stupid, and then sometimes they surprise me.