Comments | little_grey_owl: The Art of Deciphering

little_grey_owl

The Art of Deciphering

Nov 14, 2009 08:13

Title: The Art of Deciphering
Genre: science-fiction
Warnings: none
Words: 1591
Challenge: brigits_flame , November 2009, week 2, topic: key
AN: I believe I might expand this story eventually…
( Enter the land of Leets )

story, science-fiction, brigits_flame

Comments 10

quill_quirks November 15 2009, 17:33:59 UTC

OMG...a bitter war looming between the Leets and the Nooms to control, *gulp* the internet! The futuristic side of me luvs, luvs luvs this stuff! I would buy it!

little_grey_owl November 15 2009, 21:56:39 UTC

Thank you! I am glad you liked it, I don't usually write futuristic stories but I thought I'd try something different this time...

keppiehed November 16 2009, 12:26:50 UTC

I do not typically enjoy this genre, but I did get hooked rather quickly. I understand that you were bound by word count restrictions, but I would love to see more backstory on the history between the two cultures and what led them to this point. It was an interesting concept, and your offhand use of terms like "algocars" and "nutrisup" seemed very natural and unforced. Well done!

little_grey_owl November 16 2009, 15:17:57 UTC

I'm glad you found it interesting! This just turned into one of those stories for which I had far too many ideas to fit them all in. ;-)

Part One toxic_apiaceae November 19 2009, 18:41:01 UTC

Hey there, LGO! I'm Tox and I'm your editor this week ( ... )

Part Two toxic_apiaceae November 19 2009, 18:47:38 UTC

[“We Leets declare war against all Nooms ( ... )

Part Three toxic_apiaceae November 19 2009, 18:48:10 UTC

Overall Impressions ( ... )

Re: Part Three little_grey_owl November 24 2009, 02:13:28 UTC

Thank you very much for the edit! Don't worry, the edit didn't go further than I wanted; I'm a newbie so I'm still getting used to the different levels of editing anyway.
I'll work through my story again and correct the things you mentioned.
I've got a slight obsession with languages (and am taking several courses on language this semester even though I actually study biology), so I couldn't resist using this aproach to the topic. ;-)
Once again, thank you!

mullvaney November 20 2009, 18:24:37 UTC

Hello, I'm your other editor for this piece ( ... )

little_grey_owl November 24 2009, 02:19:06 UTC

Thank you for the edit!
I'll work through the story again and break those overloaded sentences down into shorter ones. I'm afraid long sentences are a bad habit I need to get rid of...
Once again, thanks!