Comments | literaryvice432: Home- a drabblefic

literaryvice432

Home- a drabblefic

Feb 06, 2010 12:16

Title: Home
Author: literaryvice432
Pairing: Callie/Arizona
Rating: PG
Summary: A short drabble about coming home after a long shift.
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fanfic: callie/arizona, art: fanfiction, fanfic

Comments 41

calzona24 February 6 2010, 19:48:59 UTC

Oh, I loved this! It was so... perfect. I can totally see them like that in four years. Nicely done!

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 21:02:35 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

elyima February 6 2010, 19:49:16 UTC

This is TOTAL sweetness and you can certainly keep writing more! :)

I had to re-read this a few times because I thought it was so interesting that it is not apparent whether this is from Callie's POV or Arizona's. Or did I miss it?

Did you do that intentionally? I want to know who you felt was returning home and who was sleeping!

You did a fantastic job and I wouldn't change a thing. My only feedback: WRITE MORE! :)

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 19:58:56 UTC

I did it intentionally because I know different things are personal canon for different people. In my head it was Arizona coming home to Callie but for some people Arizona is the one to have the kids so I left them room to read it that way.

Also, they are having a girl and she has curly black hair and green eyes (she gets them from Callie's dad). I don't know what they name her though.

elyima February 6 2010, 20:05:55 UTC

I saw Arizona coming home and getting into bed too. Interesting. So since you have such a good idea of what happens...maybe you should keep writing drabbles that sort of go through the rest of the story. Stop and make snapshot drabble every few months or so. Just a suggestion...

Black curly hair and green eyes, hmm....sounds like maybe an "Olivia" to me :)

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 20:31:05 UTC

I think I might do that but I have a reverence for characterization that makes me hesitant to do anything long term. The longer a writer works with someone else's characters the easier it becomes to bend the characters into something more of the fic writer's creation. (Yes I take this way too seriously).

I think they might name her Maia. As Calliope was one of the muses Maia is the oldest of the Pleiades and the mother of Hermes and the name is also associated with many people from Portugal and Brazil. So basically I work way harder at constructing these ideas than anyone should.

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xxcallizonaxx February 6 2010, 19:51:14 UTC

Really good ! well done !

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 21:03:10 UTC

thank you!

scaredlemon February 6 2010, 20:26:15 UTC

I really liked this! It was so sweet and so simple. I liked that it could've been from either point of view, too. I'd initially read it as Callie coming home to Arizona, but then I shifted it to Arizona coming home to Callie at the end.

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 21:04:12 UTC

Thanks! In my head it was Arizona coming home to Callie but I tried to leave room for it to be either way.

strandedinaber February 6 2010, 20:29:40 UTC

Thank you for posting this! This is lovely :)

A nod to how well you wrote it, by the way - I saw it completely the other way around and thought it was Callie coming home to Arizona because I'm such a sucker for cute blonde kids. So if you were going for that, great job!

All in all, a lovely sweet fic and a great read. Thank you!

literaryvice432 February 6 2010, 21:06:13 UTC

Thanks!

I was going for it to be readable either way. I'm a huge sucker for a kid with blonde hair and big blue eyes but in my head Callie is always the one to have the kids. Someone else suggested that it would be Arizona's eggs but Callie would carry them.