Twin Souls: Chapter 22: Gravedigging

[liralen]

Title: Gravedigging
Arc: Twin Souls
Fandom: Bleach
Beta: incandescens Without her this would not be possible.
Characters: Kyouraku, Ukitake
Rating: R for adult concepts of death
Word Count: 4,347 words
Summary: Shunsui helps with the grave digging. Jyuushiro and Kaoru help the healers. Their help does not go unnoticed.
Disclaimer: I do not own or make money

Comments

[sophiap]

I'll start off by applauding your choice in music. Utterly perfect, in so many ways.

As always, your writing is vivid and evocative. I love the description of Shunsui's inner world, and the not-too-precise description of his zanpakutou's spirit (any more detail would have killed the mystery.)

Also, I'm starting to love the Ito clan. i love the mix of high formality and rugged informality (the constrast between Rudra's and Indra's responses at the end are perfect). I don't think I've mentioned this before, but I've been enjoying the melding of Hindi and Japanese culture/languages with the Ito.

[liralen]

It turned out to be nearly the only song I could write this chapter to. *laughs* I hadn't quite expected that, but it really made sense by the end of this.

Yeah... we haven't seen Shunsui's spirit, yet, and I keep skirting that fact. *laughs*

Oh! Good... after Kali, I had to follow suit, in some sense. Incandescens did feel that the first two sons should be named something more traditional... as they are kind of traditionalists to a degree (what with the duel), and I saw her point, so the Ito clan really has become something of a mix.

[liralen]

*grins* I'm very glad that it pleased. And, yeah. Poor Shun's a little overwhelmed there.

Yeah. Jyuushiro's making his own kinds of friends, he'll be repaid pretty quickly.

Thank you!! They're getting more... complex, I think, and got pretty heavy after some fluffy. *grins* Trying to balance it out.

[stark_black]

This was so vivid. I loved Shun's inner world, and the shady description of his zanpakuto's spirit. x) When he fell to his knees and started crying I really felt the sadness, the despair that surrounded him.

Still love the Ito family, and I loved the acceptance at the end of the chapter. I know how that is. You get new guys in the platoon or company and everyone is kinda distant until something happens. Then they welcome you with open arms.

"It was odd not knowing people's names, to be unable to offer help or a word of encouragement. Cursing the hard ground felt utterly inappropriate for the final resting place of a human being. So he worked on in silence.

That line struck hard. Such great imagery.

*hugs*

[liralen]

*hugs warmly back and smiles*

Wow. Thank you. Yeah, it's the core of Shun's inner world, I think, it bemused me that it was only now that I realized why Shun dreamed of being buried in like chapter 5. *laughs*

I'm glad the Ito family is still holding up. And, yeah, you'd know better than I... I'm very glad that that rang true.

Thanks for giving me the line that struck you hardest, and for this wonderful, thoughtful comment.

[incandescens]

Excellent stuff. :) Love the world-expansion you're doing.

[liralen]

*grins* Thank you!! I'm glad that it feels like it's plausible expansion. *whews*

[xshelaghx]

Wonderful! I held out till the end but then I cried.

[liralen]

*smiles*

Wow. Thank you. It's amazing to know that the story did touch that deep.