These were the dreams of a stack of tattered books in an attic in Georgia, dreams most people gave up when they reached adulthood.
Bwee, yes. That's why so many of us are here reading and writing, isn't it? To refocus on the story a moment, I love your hints on McCoy's sense of wonder. Too many of us (myself included) make too much of his bitching and his aviophobia, and forget that he's also the guy who called Jim's attention to the Enterprise shining in space.
(Also, I am eagerly awaiting the solution to the Survey Problem. I love your powers of plotting.)
“I’m delighted to be here supervising this important mission. “We hear a lot about the Enterprise at the Admiralty.
I think you have an extra " in there before the 'We'.
By the way, I understand you and Kirk are an item.
I screamed again!
Jim was simply himself: relentless focus and boundless imagination held together with a genuine, selfless kindness.
Yes, indeedy. And do you really want to lose that just for a nonexistent safety, McCoy? (It is so beautifully him that that's a question, and a large, important one.)
Jim lingered, sheepish, one arm leaning against the frame of the door, eyes downcast, and McCoy recognized again the futility of trying to sustain a grudge against him.
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW. And oh, the ensuing discussion. It glitters with verisimilitude (and truth is rarely glittery).
“Well, you know what they say, we’re all fools in-“ he stopped abruptly.
Say it! SAY IT! SAY IT!!! (Believe it or not, I'm only writing maybe half my reactions.)
[several quotations and joyfully horrified shrieks deleted as redundant] [the entire scene between "Oh Lord, this can't be good." and "Now tongues will really wag" quoted, squealed over, and then deleted as an overlong excerpt]
I love the way you write the Kirk-Spock interaction, not least as a Kirk/McCoy shipper. Honestly, I think the K/Mc folks tend to be more respectful of the K-S friendship than the K/S folks do of the K-Mc friendship, and I love seeing that in your writing.
The end of this scene is wonderful, reminiscent of TOS but with Reboot's freshness. I hope the next movie does half as well with the triumvirate.
Next, Part 3! [When I started on a play-by-play written-as-I-read comment I didn't realize, though I should have, just how much your gorgeous story would give me to say.]
he's also the guy who called Jim's attention to the Enterprise shining in space.
What a lovely observation--I was just watching that scene today (OK, I pretty much watch that scene every day).
It is so beautifully him that that's a question, and a large, important one.
Well, that's human nature, and that's Bluebeard's Castle--we all want to push it and be just that tiniest bit more sure.
The end of this scene is wonderful, reminiscent of TOS but with Reboot's freshness.
I confess I hear TOS!Spock and TOS!McCoy in my head all the time. I think it's because everything in the movie was cranked to 11, and you never got to hear calm, ordinary dialogue from either of them.
I loved your play-by-play! I love you! It's worth writing a &#*@ story just to get your feedback.
Bwee, yes. That's why so many of us are here reading and writing, isn't it? To refocus on the story a moment, I love your hints on McCoy's sense of wonder. Too many of us (myself included) make too much of his bitching and his aviophobia, and forget that he's also the guy who called Jim's attention to the Enterprise shining in space.
(Also, I am eagerly awaiting the solution to the Survey Problem. I love your powers of plotting.)
“I’m delighted to be here supervising this important mission. “We hear a lot about the Enterprise at the Admiralty.
I think you have an extra " in there before the 'We'.
By the way, I understand you and Kirk are an item.
I screamed again!
Jim was simply himself: relentless focus and boundless imagination held together with a genuine, selfless kindness.
Yes, indeedy. And do you really want to lose that just for a nonexistent safety, McCoy?
(It is so beautifully him that that's a question, and a large, important one.)
Jim lingered, sheepish, one arm leaning against the frame of the door, eyes downcast, and McCoy recognized again the futility of trying to sustain a grudge against him.
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW. And oh, the ensuing discussion. It glitters with verisimilitude (and truth is rarely glittery).
“Well, you know what they say, we’re all fools in-“ he stopped abruptly.
Say it! SAY IT! SAY IT!!! (Believe it or not, I'm only writing maybe half my reactions.)
[several quotations and joyfully horrified shrieks deleted as redundant]
[the entire scene between "Oh Lord, this can't be good." and "Now tongues will really wag" quoted, squealed over, and then deleted as an overlong excerpt]
I love the way you write the Kirk-Spock interaction, not least as a Kirk/McCoy shipper. Honestly, I think the K/Mc folks tend to be more respectful of the K-S friendship than the K/S folks do of the K-Mc friendship, and I love seeing that in your writing.
The end of this scene is wonderful, reminiscent of TOS but with Reboot's freshness. I hope the next movie does half as well with the triumvirate.
Next, Part 3!
[When I started on a play-by-play written-as-I-read comment I didn't realize, though I should have, just how much your gorgeous story would give me to say.]
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What a lovely observation--I was just watching that scene today (OK, I pretty much watch that scene every day).
It is so beautifully him that that's a question, and a large, important one.
Well, that's human nature, and that's Bluebeard's Castle--we all want to push it and be just that tiniest bit more sure.
The end of this scene is wonderful, reminiscent of TOS but with Reboot's freshness.
I confess I hear TOS!Spock and TOS!McCoy in my head all the time. I think it's because everything in the movie was cranked to 11, and you never got to hear calm, ordinary dialogue from either of them.
I loved your play-by-play! I love you! It's worth writing a &#*@ story just to get your feedback.
ETA: And you're a wicked good proofreader, too.
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(And I'm not actually a good beta -- I'm terrible at saying "this doesn't work and here's why".)
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