Oh, bb - this WAS EXCELLENT! Clever and witty and so moving. Bone’s voice was perfect of course, and you really pull off the first person with aplomb. So many funny lines: One-handed, I type out an apologetic message to Dr. M’Benga, leaving out the capital letters so I’ll seem extra unwell.
This may be one of the best summations of Jim’s character ever written! :He was an energy drink in human form with a mind as deep as the ocean and changeable as the sky. God, how could anyone not love Jim?
Your writing is effortlessly smart and clever and sexy filled with your trademark, unerring understanding of human nature: But romantic grief always sounds ridiculous in real life. and The copy of Progressive Dairy Farmer on the coffee table is a reminder that successful relationships seem to thrive on fiction.
And I loved this line: You master things so quickly, it’s like you squeeze all the juice out and throw them away and move on to the next thing.
The sections which were all memory were touching and so fucking sad, we really felt Leonard’s panic, his back-pedalling as Jim was about to disappear out of his life.
The embarrassing memory was mortifying while also being really funny:
Dr. McCoy freezes, trying to take in the sight of his honor student son jerking off to gay porn in the chair where he does his taxes.
Beautifully crafted, emotionally true and so, so clever. You’ve often spoken of how what attracts you to this pairing is how filled with human frailties they are yet somehow it works and this was a perfect example of that. I loved every word, bb, thank you for sharing this - it’s going to haunt me in good ways for a good long time.
I get so excited when I know you're reading one of my stories, and your wonderful, generous comments are like a box of chocolates--I enjoy every bit!
I know you spend a lot of time and deep thought thinking about the nature of love, and this was my go at it--how it's really about the small things, companionship and someone to bitch to after work and to remember to pick up your favorite thing at the food store. The cutified, idealized Romance that everyone talks about on Valentine's Day doesn't bear much ressemblance to that, which I think is a shame.
Anyhow, you are the absolute best as usual, and I wish you luck finishing your story and can't wait to read it!
This may be one of the best summations of Jim’s character ever written! :He was an energy drink in human form with a mind as deep as the ocean and changeable as the sky. God, how could anyone not love Jim?
Your writing is effortlessly smart and clever and sexy filled with your trademark, unerring understanding of human nature: But romantic grief always sounds ridiculous in real life. and The copy of Progressive Dairy Farmer on the coffee table is a reminder that successful relationships seem to thrive on fiction.
And I loved this line: You master things so quickly, it’s like you squeeze all the juice out and throw them away and move on to the next thing.
The sections which were all memory were touching and so fucking sad, we really felt Leonard’s panic, his back-pedalling as Jim was about to disappear out of his life.
The embarrassing memory was mortifying while also being really funny:
Dr. McCoy freezes, trying to take in the sight of his honor student son jerking off to gay porn in the chair where he does his taxes.
Beautifully crafted, emotionally true and so, so clever. You’ve often spoken of how what attracts you to this pairing is how filled with human frailties they are yet somehow it works and this was a perfect example of that. I loved every word, bb, thank you for sharing this - it’s going to haunt me in good ways for a good long time.
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I know you spend a lot of time and deep thought thinking about the nature of love, and this was my go at it--how it's really about the small things, companionship and someone to bitch to after work and to remember to pick up your favorite thing at the food store. The cutified, idealized Romance that everyone talks about on Valentine's Day doesn't bear much ressemblance to that, which I think is a shame.
Anyhow, you are the absolute best as usual, and I wish you luck finishing your story and can't wait to read it!
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