What a treat to find this as soon as I refreshed my flist! I thought you'd keep us waiting for a couple of days.
I love this, for so many reasons: the Doctor going all mediaevel and presidential on the Colonel, the Doctor claiming Jack and making very clear what he's prepared to do to keep Jack safe, and then the inevitable run - the perfect touch. The scene in the TARDIS is the perfect coda, too, with Jack realising that the Doctor was perfectly serious. He really is worth all of that.
The only thing that leaves me with a lump in my throat is this: “What I said was that you were mine to protect. The words bind me, not you.”
- and not for anything in this story, but for what we know happens some time in the near(ish) future, when the Doctor abandons Jack on Satellite Five. If that still happens in this universe of yours, then the Doctor's binding pledge doesn't mean much to him, sadly :(
Lovely story, and I hope you're planning to post it on the Teaspoon, as I'd like to favourite it.
LJ wouldn't let me post the whole thing as one entry. It's been submitted to Teaspoon, and should appear there soon.
I think that part of the Doctor is a medieval lord. However much he rebelled, he is still a product of his culture.
As for my "universe", I'm not sure that I have one, and if I do, where it is leading. If the scene on the Game Station remains the same, it will be because the Doctor is fallible, like us lesser mortals, and doesn't always live up to his ideals.
Yes, you get that problem with LJ sometimes, though mostly if you're posting in Rich Text mode. Posting in HTML, where you do all your coding manually, usually allows longer posts. But two parts is good - heightens anticipation :)
Well, you've definitely started a universe here; whether you continue it or not is, of course, your choice, though I'm very much enjoying your version of events between TDD and Boom Town.
If the scene on the Game Station remains the same, it will be because the Doctor is fallible, like us lesser mortals, and doesn't always live up to his ideals.
Oh, I agree; he's certainly prone to mistakes, as we've seen on screen many times, of course. That rather thin explanation we got for the Doctor abandoning Jack is one of the worst of those, and that outcome always feels sadder still when I read a good fic that really develops a relationship of trust between the Doctor and Jack.
Well, you've definitely started a universe here; whether you continue it or not is, of course, your choice, though I'm very much enjoying your version of events between TDD and Boom Town.
Meta question: is it a a universe if it's still canon-compliant and has no (major) original characters? In any case, I'm sure I'll keep writing about Nine/Jack/Rose; I'm less sure if it's my choice. I have a very unpredictable muse.
This was exceptionally good - spot-on characterisation, great dialogue and description. I loved the little traditions and culture you built up around the Doctor and the Time Agency. It all felt very real and plausible, and the coda in the TARDIS was lovely. Nice work. :)
I'm not the first to assume a connection between the Time Agency and Gallifrey. It makes a lot of sense to me. If the CIA is willing/authorized to draft an unwilling Time Lord, how much more likely is it that they could press-gang some lowly humans who have the chutzpah to travel in time?
Thanks! I'm starting to feel comfortable with these two characters. Less so with Rose -- and she will need to be in the next story -- but perhaps if I buy her some chips, she'll cooperate.
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I love this, for so many reasons: the Doctor going all mediaevel and presidential on the Colonel, the Doctor claiming Jack and making very clear what he's prepared to do to keep Jack safe, and then the inevitable run - the perfect touch. The scene in the TARDIS is the perfect coda, too, with Jack realising that the Doctor was perfectly serious. He really is worth all of that.
The only thing that leaves me with a lump in my throat is this:
“What I said was that you were mine to protect. The words bind me, not you.”
- and not for anything in this story, but for what we know happens some time in the near(ish) future, when the Doctor abandons Jack on Satellite Five. If that still happens in this universe of yours, then the Doctor's binding pledge doesn't mean much to him, sadly :(
Lovely story, and I hope you're planning to post it on the Teaspoon, as I'd like to favourite it.
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I think that part of the Doctor is a medieval lord. However much he rebelled, he is still a product of his culture.
As for my "universe", I'm not sure that I have one, and if I do, where it is leading. If the scene on the Game Station remains the same, it will be because the Doctor is fallible, like us lesser mortals, and doesn't always live up to his ideals.
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Well, you've definitely started a universe here; whether you continue it or not is, of course, your choice, though I'm very much enjoying your version of events between TDD and Boom Town.
If the scene on the Game Station remains the same, it will be because the Doctor is fallible, like us lesser mortals, and doesn't always live up to his ideals.
Oh, I agree; he's certainly prone to mistakes, as we've seen on screen many times, of course. That rather thin explanation we got for the Doctor abandoning Jack is one of the worst of those, and that outcome always feels sadder still when I read a good fic that really develops a relationship of trust between the Doctor and Jack.
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Meta question: is it a a universe if it's still canon-compliant and has no (major) original characters? In any case, I'm sure I'll keep writing about Nine/Jack/Rose; I'm less sure if it's my choice. I have a very unpredictable muse.
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I'm not the first to assume a connection between the Time Agency and Gallifrey. It makes a lot of sense to me. If the CIA is willing/authorized to draft an unwilling Time Lord, how much more likely is it that they could press-gang some lowly humans who have the chutzpah to travel in time?
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