Fic: Lyonnesse (3/15 + epilogue)

[lindenharp]

Title: Lyonnesse (3/?)
Characters: Ninth Doctor, Rose Tyler, Jack Harkness
Series: Changes!verse
Rating: PG
Spoilers: none.
Summary: A supposedly harmless planet holds unexpected dangers, and disturbing revelations about the Doctor's past.
Disclaimer: The sandbox belongs to RTD and the BBC. I'm just playing here, in the corner, making little sand-

Comments

[edenfalling]

Yikes! That can't be good, especially given the way this story started.

I really like your attempt to explain the Time War in such a temporally inexact language as English. :-)

[lindenharp]

Yikes! That can't be good

I suspect Rose and Jack might agree with you. :-(

I really like your attempt to explain the Time War in such a temporally inexact language as English.

Thank you! I didn't have much of a choice. LJ has enough trouble with English; can you imagine trying to post in Gallifreyan? :-)

[edenfalling]

LJ has enough trouble with English; can you imagine trying to post in Gallifreyan?

*ponders* It could probably be done as a photo montage. Of course, then there would be the problem of learning Gallifreyan so as to be able to read it instead of just going, "Ooh, pretty circles!" *sigh* Life is an endless series of compromises, I suppose.

[garpu]

It's never a good idea to threaten a Time Lord...

[lindenharp]

It's almost as stupid as injuring his companions...

[garpu]

Yeah, that too.

[kaffy_r]

This just gets better and better. The way you've drawn Jack's and Rose's reactions to what they continue to learn about the Time War is completely believable, consistent with what we know of their characters, and a joy to read, because your command of dialogue is so admirable. The story itself is a worrisome mystery - which makes it all the better!

[lindenharp]

I fretted a lot over this chapter. How much would the Doctor say about the Time War? How would the others react? I'm still trying to figure out how their new relationship changes their interactions (other than the obvious).

The story itself is a worrisome mystery

Don't worry... too much. I am incapable of writing pure angst in any story longer than a drabble, and I don't do death!fics.

Thank you for your kind words!

[simons_flower]

I'm always so delighted when you post another chapter to this because it's a treat to read, this chapter being no exception.

I loved the analogy of saber-rattling (though I think you have a blockquote tag messed up there) -- it just tickled me and delighted me because it seemed so perfect though it annoyed me because I didn't think of it.

The ending? Not so good for our intrepid trio. Good for the author to keep the readers hanging (*glares at author*), not good for the characters. I eagerly await the next chapter.

[lindenharp]

I'm always so delighted when you post another chapter to this because it's a treat to read

Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

I loved the analogy of saber-rattling (though I think you have a blockquote tag messed up there)

Nine himself reminds me of a sword. There's steel under that leather, and it's drawn blood. Thanks for pointing out the blockquote goof. It's fixed now -- I think.

The ending? Not so good for our intrepid trio. Good for the author to keep the readers hanging (*glares at author*)

*smiles serenely* I'm an Old-School fan. If it's multi-chaptered, it's got cliffhangers.

[dark_aegis]

This is fantastic. I love how you explore the Time War in as inexact of a language as English, and the entire story is just so incredibly fascinating. I can't wait for the next installment!

[lindenharp]

*blushes/mumbles/shuffles feet*

Thanks. Compliments from writers I admire are especially encouraging.

Exploring the Time War in English is a challenge, but vagueness covers a multitude of sins. Alas, I no longer have a live-in physicist.

I will try not to be too long with the next installment, Much depends on my Muse. As with most of my stories, I have only a loose plot concept in my head. IOW, I'm making it up as I go along. :-)

[dark_aegis]

I sympathise :) I'm in the same boat with my current story. My muse has been rather dubious as of late in terms of behaving. (And letting me write more than a few paragraphs a night)