Seasons' Greetings 2011 ♥ A Gift for brucethegirl

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Title: When In Manchester
Author: randomneses
Recipient: brucethegirl
Rating: PG-13
Wordcount: 3390
Warnings: Copious amounts of swearing
Summary: A power outage in the Evans' home leaves Lily and James in the dark over Christmas holiday.
Author's Note: Much thanks to Sara for betaing this in such short notice.

Comments

[perilousgard]

I really enjoyed this! James' reactions to the Muggle things in Lily's house was priceless, and I loved the way you set up the scene when they first Apparate into the alley. I felt like I could see Lily's hometown very vividly. I also liked all the details, like the description of the graffiti on the alley walls and the colors of Lily's candles.

The only complaint I have is that the constant cursing was a little distracting from the dialogue. I think a lot of it could read a lot better without. But that's just my opinion.

:) Otherwise, fantastic job!

[escribo]

Oh oh oh. It's so realistic and the reactions are so true. I rather wanted to drink it in rather than read it. So many twists and turns and moments to linger in. Excellent.

[secretsolitaire]

This is gorgeous. I really liked the conversation about Snape, and James loving Lily's big heart, and James being afraid of the Hoover. :-D

[brucethegirl]

THIS IS SO AMAZING!!! Thank you so much! It's just PERFECT! Thank You Thank You Thank You!!!!!

[broken_enemy]

This is wonderful! I love James' fear of the hoover and their conversation about Snape. Lovely.