Games2011 ♥ FIC: Here Comes The Sun [PG-13+]

[lilyjames_mod]

Title: Here Comes the Sun
Author: firstbreaths
Team: DOE
Rating: PG13+
Wordcount: ~5800
Warnings: Minor coarse language
Prompt: Quidditch
Summary: You’ve always imagined your relationship with Lily Evans to be rather like Quidditch
Author's Note: A big thanks to the mods for running such a fantastic fest - I can’t wait to see all the fabulous fic and artwork

Comments

[museme87]

So I love the way that you've incorporated what could have been a really simple prompt into a complex, moving fic. Really, you made each passage fresh, while still keeping it centered on Quidditch, which is not an easy task to accomplish.

My favorite part, hands down, is the second person interludes between scenes. Making an analogy between James' feelings for Lily and Quidditch has almost become a cliche in this ship. However, you've put a fresh spin-- a 5k fresh spin, no less--on it and it completely worked. I think the power of these sections lies in the details you've provided and how you carried their relationship along with stages of the game.

Generally, I loved the deep insight into James' character. You really see the growth and maturity here that we never got in canon, and I adore your for exploring that. Because, honestly, we don't love James because he was a golden boy of Gryffindor, but because he was often mistaken, misbehaving, and all around imperfect. The mention of the acne made it all the better! Realistic, and so very attractive because of it.

Really, really well done, mystery author.

[firstbreaths]

Thank you so much! ♥

I think one of the reasons I was drawn to the prompt is because everyone's done it except me, so I wanted to play around with it and see if I could put my own spin on the prompt, which this fest gave me the perfect opportunity to do! As for James and the acne (something which I'm amazed that everyone is commenting on), I do sort of think that the James we see in canon is almost too perfect because of the bias of the characters we see him through (Sirius/Remus/Harry/Dumbledore), so I love the idea of him not being perfect, but still damn attractive because of it.