Lily/James Games 2011 ♥ Expecto Patronum Round 3

Apr 10, 2011 21:00

Expecto Patronum

Round 3

Welcome to the third of our (four) Lily/James Games Expecto Patronum Rounds! Please note:
  • The mods will be compiling a masterlist of all drabbles/drawbles created for the EP rounds and any team challenges to be posted at the end of the Games. We just wanted to let everyone know what's happening on that front.
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Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard perilousgard April 13 2011, 02:05:15 UTC
Title: Barside Reflections
Author/Artist: perilousgard
Team: Stag
Rating & Warnings: None.
Summary: Someone doesn't get an invitation to the wedding.
Author's Note: Please excuse craptastic title.

He doesn’t get an invitation, but hears about it anyway, while down at the pub. One of Lily’s friends is chatting with the bartender as he orders another butterbeer.

“I just got it in the mail today! Lily and James, can you believe it?”

Lily. Getting married.

Getting married to him.

Severus can’t even bring himself to think the name, and instead his head becomes filled with the echoes of Lily’s voice, which he hasn’t heard now for almost two years.

“I know James Potter’s an arrogant toerag.”

“I’d never go out with him anyway, Severus. It doesn’t matter how many times he asks me.”

“He’s infuriating, I can’t stand him! What a stupid berk!”

They’d all made Severus smile, made his heart beat just a little faster when he heard them, made him think that maybe, if given enough time, he would be able to convince Lily that he was the only one who could love her the way she deserves to be loved.

He remained convinced, until the end of their seventh year, that Lily had been put under a very powerful spell that James had concocted to make her look at him the way he wanted her to look at him. How could it have been real, after all the time she had spent loathing him?

He doesn’t taste the butterbeer as it slides down his throat. He can’t stop staring at the girl, the girl who’d received an invitation to Lily’s wedding. One of Lily’s friends, a connection to her. He works his mouth, swallows. His throat feels dry from disuse.

“When is the wedding?”

The girl looks round at him, the smile fading from her mouth as she takes in his appearance. Severus wonders if the curl in her lip is because she recognizes him or because his robes haven’t been cleaned in months. “It’s going to be a very private ceremony. I’m afraid if you didn’t get an invitation, I can’t tell you.”

He lets her walk away. Severus knows Lily would not want him to show up at the ceremony. There’s a reason he didn’t get that invitation, after all.

He stares into his butterbeer and thinks of the last day he saw her, on the train ride back from Hogwarts at the end of seventh year. He thinks of her hair glowing in the sun streaming through the window and the sound of her laughter. He does not think of the frost that had darkened her green eyes when she noticed him looking into her compartment, nor the way she had strode purposefully past him once they got off the train, holding tight to James Potter’s hand.

He sits there, and thinks of her, and clutches his right forearm.

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard zia_montrose April 13 2011, 02:23:24 UTC
Oh, I love what you've done here--from your POV choice to the way you've written it. They’d all made Severus smile, made his heart beat just a little faster... It's convincingly Severus.

And the last big paragraph really brings the rift home.

This is a really nice drabble. I totally enjoyed it!

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard perilousgard April 13 2011, 02:34:33 UTC
Oh yay! Thanks, he's really hard to write. :D

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard sukebe_miroku April 13 2011, 02:40:49 UTC
Yes he is! *scowls*

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard sukebe_miroku April 13 2011, 02:43:45 UTC
FIRST! No excuses on your craptastic title, you! *points finger*

NEXT! I can't write Snape like you can. Here you are, saying I do just fine, when in face, I suck balls. Really bad at it, I tell you! You must be going mental!

FINALLY! I love this. It's a nice take on the prompt. I have another idea, soooo maybe I should write it. :3 Anyway, you know me, I love all your work, sweetie, so *in an Irish accent* Beautiful work, love~ :3

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard museme87 April 13 2011, 02:45:26 UTC
I liked how we get to see a slightly colder side to Lily here. And, while not a huge Snape fan, I'm glad he made an appearance in one of the EP rounds! You wrote his creepiness (yet almost sympathetic creepiness) really well. :)

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard perilousgard April 13 2011, 02:53:03 UTC
Funny thing is, I really don't like him either. But for some reason I like writing about his and Lily's relationship. And this kind of jumped out at me so I thought I'd give it a shot. :)

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard killerbunny117 April 13 2011, 04:25:08 UTC
That was really really. I love that you went from snapes POV. Great job!

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard marthemaria April 13 2011, 21:10:41 UTC
I love that you used Snape in this drabble. Through the series, it's really hard to sympathize with him - except for those achingly sad memories in Deathly Hallows - but in this fic, you had my sympathy right away (: Fantastic last line by the way.

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard missgoalie75 April 14 2011, 01:35:29 UTC
Oooh, I was hoping someone would write Snape's POV on this. The last line was perfect - awesome job!

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard liebedance April 15 2011, 00:40:47 UTC
Lovely job, dear. I really liked the POV here. It's interesting to see these sorts of things from Snape's POV. Especially since James wins at the end. :D

But really, I enjoyed reading this.

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard perilousgard April 15 2011, 02:03:15 UTC
Snape is really interesting to delve into as a character. I don't ship him with Lily at all, but I am fascinated by their relationship.

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Re: Stag, [FIC, G] Barside Reflections by perilousgard klose April 17 2011, 06:43:12 UTC
I'm really glad to see this - I'm not a Snape fan by any means, but his "voice" here felt very strong and credible: his feelings for Lily are obvious... along with the rather obsessive nature of those feelings. Especially that last line - ouch. I'm almost sympathetic towards him (but I suppose he made his own bed...)

Fantastic work - thanks for sharing this! And always great & refreshing to see an L/J-focused fic that uses other characters, too. :D

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