College essay for Vasholz..

[lilroyroy]

Please give me any feed back....if it sucks, tell me

Comments

gooooood

[chicoandtheman]

I like it!

you get an A+ from me

Re: gooooood

[lilroyroy]

yay thanks! it still needs some fixing but i guess eventually it should be college application material.

[chicoandtheman]

Not bad, kiddo! The essay itself is good, but I would suggest you revise it a few times. And did you spell "pus" right? Don't worry about having the most formal tone or the most complex sentence structures. Aim for purity of thought.

its wunsch

[anonymous]

my feet hurt just reading it......
in fact my ingrown toenails are wrecking havoc on my feet as we speak!

Re: its wunsch

[babyjewgurl]

dont you think thats a little harsh? i'm not sure what your talking about, or where that came from but please elaborate. it seems kinda random liz that i haven't seen you since you graduate and thats the first thing i see you write on there about me.

it's the real wunsch again

[anonymous]

Hi liz! I'm good, and yourself? Im glad no one was blown away in this "hurricane" that wasnt even a thunderstorm. Random thought of the day! As for nay, I like her, so i dunno, her buisness is her own, and that is that.