My first Songfic..

[lillithvalo]

 I'm new to this so i don't know how to set everything up.. so be nice to me

The song is by Evanescance ~Even in Death~
It's Bam's POV  dealing with Ville's death..
I hope you like it..

PIC :) I drew this.. I have a ton of them..

Comments

[slasher48]

*cuddles and cries*

Why haven't you told me about this?

It was horribly heartbreaking, but I loved reading every word.

Gorgeous in all its misery. :)

[lillithvalo]

I didn't tell anyone... i just posted it to see if anyone paid attention to me...LOL
I guess some do

[slasher48]

I saw it linked on a comment board and wanted to read.

You have talent, raw talent, you just need some editing skills.

I have no time for reading individual journals, sadly. :(.

♥

[lillithvalo]

LOL.. editing... yea

[slasher48]

XD. Yes.

Please, please at least put quotations when you say things in the story. I swear, I almost threw myself out a window. It's got a great plot, just needs some spit shine. ;)

[slasher48]

lol.. i did that in my Song fic... I guess i can do that in the story i'm doing...
don't throw yourself out the window... then what fun would i have...LOL

[slasher48]

I know.

Please, before you send me all...Jesus, how many chapters again? Put quotations in.

I know! Who would borderline cyber with you XD

[lillithvalo]

LOL...
I will... 60+ for the first one and 100+ for the second... i write stories.. looooong ones.. i can't stop...LOL

[slasher48]

Well, I like them already.

But I badly need quotations.

The rest, I can take care of. Just punctuation and quotations or I'll be at the loony bin after three chapters. :\.

[lillithvalo]

I'll do my best sweety... but i suck at that.. ways suck at it...

[slasher48]

Well. Just when they say things, put

"Hello," (without the hello)

Or "Hello?" If it's questioning

or "Hello!" If it's angry or surprised or something intense.

Or "Hello, my name is Bam." if it's a sentence.

[lillithvalo]

ok doll face... i know the comma goes where ever you might pause.. so i'll try my best..
working on some now... what was the last chapter i sent you?

[slasher48]

Thank you so much baby love. I appreciate it so much, you don't even know.

♥ The first and second chapters.

[lillithvalo]

really?.. you like it?..
where did i leave off at?

[slasher48]

Yes. Despite my eyes burning because it badly needed a beta, the plot kept me reading. ;)

All I ask is you go through the chapters and fix it so there's quotes around everything that's said. That's it. If you want to do more, fine, but that's all I really need.

Send me afterwards and I'll do the rest.

[lillithvalo]

what chapter did i leave off at?