Happy!Wes ficathon entry

[lillianmorgan]

So it's all about making Wes happy....
The lovely and talented caoilainn has organised a Happy!Wes ficathon and I got the prize of writing for her ::is nervous:: So hope you like

Comments

[avidrosette]

What a subtle and lovely story! You plunge the reader into the disorientingly unfamiliar thoughts of a very different Wesley. We seek to get our bearings just as Wes does without the stabilizing reference of the immediate past. Love the way you have us experience this bewilderment rather than merely relating to us what your character is feeling. Very powerful this way: we experience Wes's disorientation right along with him.

The way you have Wesley unable to account for what he's become is fascinating and very sensitively imagined. Great the way you have him attempt to construct an identity inorganically, from pieces that don't fit.

You convey a great sense of discovery as Wes slowly uncovers his hidden past. I especially like the way Angel's writing pokes through the text of the diary, just as Wes's buried memories poke through his unconscious.

Great line: "I never really sought to understand his intentions, deeply psychological as they were, for more often than not I would be far too swept up in what was happening to think straight."

Love the Gothic ambience you've given the story, right down to the 19th-century language and repressed memories of transgressive sexual desires. That's one of my favorite genres and you've evoked it very skillfully here.

Another wonderful line: "And then he smiled, his lips cracking in disuse, and, for a moment, he remembered how to believe in hope."

Lovely imagery. It's obvious that you've paid attention to every word in this refreshingly unusual and lovingly crafted story.

[lillianmorgan]

Wow, what absolutely amazing feedback - I am really overwhelmed by the nice things you said! You make the story sound much better than it is! :) And thank you so much for taking the time to write so much, with so much detail - it really means a great deal!
You convey a great sense of discovery as Wes slowly uncovers his hidden past. I especially like the way Angel's writing pokes through the text of the diary, just as Wes's buried memories poke through his unconscious.
What a really perceptive comment - I'm really glad you caught the intricacy of the layers, though to be honest I'm not sure I did them all consciously! But they are all about layers after all! :)
That's one of my favorite genres and you've evoked it very skillfully here.
Really interesting to know - and will certainly make reading your work more intriguing. I've read and studied a bit, and I suppose the Watchers do fit into that 19th century world of repression, power and the dominance of the male perspective.
Thanks once again so much!! Really made my day :)