Week 3 post - Me you and My mother (response to "Olive Grove")

[lilib3t]

In my response ive also tried to change the shaping of the poems structure to further reinforce my intensions , as we spoke about in class

Comments

[dearjohnnyred]

I find the form of your poem really interesting, but at times a little disjointed. While I'm all for unconventional form and all that, I feel at times your message becomes a little hard to understand through all the line breaks and such.

I sound really critical (yuck) so I'll go back to how I feel about your poem itself. I think you got across a certain feeling and messages really well. I think that linking everything in the beginning in the end back to the concept of the mother was very effective. I also liked the way you swapped between general feelings and specific examples.

Good poem, I don't really know where I was going with all that!

Johnny x

heapsss gooood

[sibz_09]

wow dis is a really nice entry, i mean the things inside it lust, backstabing gossiping are never nice but the way you brought it all together it really got to me and i can really relate to it. It was great to read.