FMA Fic - 2,000 Miles - Chapter 4

[lil_missb]

My goal for 2007 is to update a fic once a month at the least.

Title: 2,000 Miles
Summary: Two thousand miles and more ghosts than that to haunt them.
Pairing: EdwardxWinry.
SpoilersPost series, so yeah. A little bit of an alternate ending. No movie though. Doesn't even exist.
Rating PG - NC-17 This chapter: PG
FMA does not belong to me and I

Comments

[ketto_thrast]

awe, that was soooo nice. It was such a pleasent read. thank you for posting ^-^

yay! another chapter! *dances* i love the direction your going; and i love the mood you've set between Winry and Ed. it seems very plausible in that situation, and it feels natural too. awesome job ^-^

and the first kiss idea was sooo good! and i felt bad because i understood where Edward was coming from -but then again i was snickering because that's just like Winry. "She dared me too, so i did!" that just sounded so true to her character. very nice! i loved that lil' drop.

and the coffee conversation was so cute yet heart breaking! and it's true; the smallest things bring back memories -though i also liked that line about Al sitting up in bed holding his cup of coffee and trying to be strong. that did burn an image in my mind. the words were so simple yet sooooo effective. brilliant! and i also loved Winry silently slipping in and trying to calm him down -not with words, but with actions. After all, we all know Ed won't listen if he doesn't want too; but good old fashioned physical action, that's something he can relate too and understand. i really enjoyed it.

keep up the awesome work; this chapter was so good! i'll be lurking and waiting ;)

~Melissa the Damgel

[lil_missb]

I'll take lurking over stalking any day!!1 ;)

And that line about coffee, funny you should mention it because I was thinking of rewriting it. I don't know, for some reason, it sounds to me like it's a little run-on-ish.