permanently black & blue (for you). ben/skandar, nc-17.

[likecharity]

Howww is this the first time I've written Ben/Skandar without a third (or fourth or fifth...) party?

Title: permanently black & blue (for you)
Author: likecharity
Pairing: Ben/Skandar
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Real person slash, accidental (and a little bit of purposeful) violence.
Summary: Skandar looks a little wide-eyed. "God," he says, "this is

Comments

[moogle62]

okay, well, this is going to be ridiculous and embarrassing but we already knew that.

- alarming some of the props people - firstly: LOL.
- Ben is clutching at his leg, sort of bent over. - well, this was the first time I went a bit wrong.
- except Skandar of course, who is panicking. - I LOVE how you wrote Skandar in this fic. Sort of mess of panic about hurting Ben and then just alllll the apologies, and how teenage boy he was (all the swearing! He won't think Ben's a pussy! Don't be a dick! it was perfect) and then in juxtaposition, how self-assured he was when it came to the Things (oh benito).
- Skandar trying to magically cure the pain with his hands!
- Ben dropping to the floor the second time. jsdbfhjg
- giving Skandar a very strained, tight-lipped grin. His eyes are watering. Skandar hates himself. - well I think you know how well I coped with that. NOT AT ALL WELL. gnnng.
- I love Ben's constant insistence that he's FINE even though he is oooobviously not.
- Skandar thinking the extras are pleased he finally got it! DISTRACTED BECAUSE BEN LOOKED SO HAPPY, I had sort of forgotten we talked about that and then it turned up here and was just as amazing as the first time you mentioned it.
- Ben lets out a harrowing yell of pain, and his body crumples onto the floor. Skandar wants to stab himself in the face.
- OH GOD. (also: Skandar, lol.)
- He stops touching it - lol again, but also BENNNNITO. That whole Ben POV section made me go all sorts of wrong.
- Ben cryingggggg, oh jesus. and how it was sort of involuntary. just. fnnnnng.
- "Ben, it's me, can I come in and help? I'm so sorry. I might've mentioned that. But I really am." - SRSLY I HEART THIS SKANDAR.
- Oh no, Skandar thinks. Oh no, he's caused him concussion, he's made him go delirious from pain. What if he's destroyed Ben's grip on reality permanently-? - SEE ABOVE.
- his voice has that sort of sore-and-weak quality about it - kjdfgjhgsfkjhf
- Skandar going along with Ben's flimsy being-totally-fine pretence. BEN SITTING DOWN WHEN SKANDAR TELLS HIM TOO. ALL OF SKANDAR'S GUILT.
- little trickle of water runs down his chin, collects into droplets on his beard. - don't even know what it is about this image, but jaGDHGFJDS. I accidently turned capslock on in my flail just then.
- The whole can/face thing (an... odd ship)
- Skandar being so freaked out by seeing Ben so upset! Ben just being like I AM FINE and then Michael turning up like LOOK A MEDICAL PROFESSIONAL, CEASE YOUR INEXPERT MEDICINE/SEXUAL ADVANCES SKANDAR KEYNES
- the whole bit where Skandar says he won't think Ben's a pussy if he admits he's in pain
- He rolls the can over slightly, down to Ben's lip again, and Ben jerks and swears, a high, breathy little "fuck". - FNNNNNNG.
- The whole cyclical argument about where to assign blame! The entirely-my-fault/it-was-an-accident/an-accident-of-mine bit I think is my favourite. RIGHT UP UNTIL SKANDAR ATTEMPTS TO HEAL IT WITH HIS MOUTH.
- . He sounds angry, like he thinks Skandar was actually trying to hurt him, and Skandar feels like it should be pretty fucking obvious what he's doing. - ahsdghjkgfdjsfgkshdfs etc etc etc
- "Um," Skandar says, grappling wildly around his own brain for some actual words. - I lol'd.
- he settles for internal distress and avoiding Skandar wherever possible - and again. I reeeeally love the way you write Ben, just, in all your fics. I think my favourite incarnation is weird!Ben, but isn't he everyone's favourite? ALL THE BENS ARE GREAT.
- lolol the first failed tackle attempt. Skandar just flopping over.
- Ben being unreasonably annoyed by Skandar's snarky comment and just blamming him into the deck aksgdhjf
- (Though it probably comes across better on screen than his first attempt.) - OH BENITO, SUCH A PRO.
- Ben being all like "join the club" and Georgie being like RAAAAGE was amazing, thank you for putting that in my life.
-He's never been very good at dealing with an angry Georgie - I don't think he'd be the only one to think that
- "He told me to do it like a man," he says in a quiet voice. - FLAIL FLAIL SO MUCH FLAIL

[likecharity]

I WISH YOU COULD SEE MY SMILE. I REALLY DO. IT IS LIKE THIS:

:D

I LOVE YOU AND I AM SO GLAD THAT YOU LIKED THIS. Honestly it's the one that stressed me out the most, of my recent stories, and I WAS WORRIED MAYBE I WOULD LET YOU DOWN IDK. I'm glad I didn't and thaaaaaank you for the comment, seriously grinning like a maniac.

I won't go through every single thing you said, but, typical teenage boy-esque Skandar was especially easy to write with Ben for some reason, that characterisation seemed to work, I'm glad you liked it in general and it didn't seem to jump about too much. And Ben's characterisation too - I actually think he and Skandar are my two favourite POVs to write from, so idk why this was so hard. Maybe the combination of the two. But yes WRITING BEN IS FUN I'm glad you like my Ben(s)?

The image of the condensation on Ben's beard made me go a bit flaily too, I'm not sure why either.

Michael turning up like LOOK A MEDICAL PROFESSIONAL, CEASE YOUR INEXPERT MEDICINE/SEXUAL ADVANCES SKANDAR KEYNES
HAHAHAHA for real this bit made me BURST OUT LAUGHING and then I was worried I would wake my Dad up so I was like *choked giggle* for a minute or two. I should have had that be Michael's ACTUAL LINE, it would have been awesome.

Georgie had such a brief part in this (and there was no Will P. AT ALL, SORRY WILL P.) but I wanted to get across the sort of casual easiness of her care for him in contrast to Ben not knowing what to do, and how she was sort of being like an anxious sister all protective, idk. And how Skandar was totally all "sweary sweary grouch grouch STOP TOUCHING ME" with her but he wouldn't be like that with Ben.