Oh yes, I remember hoping someone would pick this up and write it!
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Although I can obviously guess from the pairing and your last para, I'm still interested to see how it's going to work. Is Gene going to accost Sam on the way out (don't do it, Gene, he'll be too tired). Or is he going to take him to Lost & Found tomorrow to have a ...talk ... about it?
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Um, shorts? In the middle of the night? In Manchester?? Much as I would love to see Gene's knees, I'm having problems seeing this. Especially in 1973.
she left early, giving the finger presumably this is the American middle-digit jobbie. We didn't have that in 1973; she would have been "sticking up two fingers" or maybe "flicking them the V's" (although I think that expression is post-1973).
Yep, meant underpants rather than shorts...but fixed it, because one cannot be picturing Gene in shorts at this point (-:. Also fixed the rigid digit, though in Oz I'm sure we were using that saying in the 70s. Still, will go with a local there.
Hmmm. I don't avoid WIPs, but I get wary. You have a good set up, though, so I'd hate to see this die.
To be honest, Tyler never strikes me as the 'hire a prozzie' kind, for any reason, but I could see him falling for the boy, in a way, and trying to save him.
And what I can TOTALLY see is Gene being more worried about the potential threat to his team via blackmail than about Tyler's 'proclivities' or even his own nascent arousal. That was a good stroke of plot.
Yes, its more a story written as I have time and posted as a sort of 'stream of consciousness' rather than a wip. And yes, by now you can probably guess re the prostitue thing.
Yes, work in progress, that is, a story posted in incomplete sections rather than all at once. Its a temptation to do which I try to resist, as in the past I've sometimes not completed these stories when I've run out of time or inspiration. This one, though, is nearly complete so it will be safe.
See, I like this. It's well written and leaves me wanting the next chapter. But I have a hard time buying that Sam would hire a prostitute. Perhaps there's another reason and this is meant to mislead us and Gene. If not, I would consider a re-write of the OC - not too big a change to make him a club boy brought in for possession.
I just don't think that Sam would change his moral code just because the prostitute was male instead of female, so it comes across as a bit OOC.
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I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Although I can obviously guess from the pairing and your last para, I'm still interested to see how it's going to work. Is Gene going to accost Sam on the way out (don't do it, Gene, he'll be too tired). Or is he going to take him to Lost & Found tomorrow to have a ...talk ... about it?
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Um, shorts? In the middle of the night? In Manchester?? Much as I would love to see Gene's knees, I'm having problems seeing this. Especially in 1973.
she left early, giving the finger presumably this is the American middle-digit jobbie. We didn't have that in 1973; she would have been "sticking up two fingers" or maybe "flicking them the V's" (although I think that expression is post-1973).
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Sorry to shove in there :)
Will now comment further down!
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I anticipate surprises all round...(-: Ta
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To be honest, Tyler never strikes me as the 'hire a prozzie' kind, for any reason, but I could see him falling for the boy, in a way, and trying to save him.
And what I can TOTALLY see is Gene being more worried about the potential threat to his team via blackmail than about Tyler's 'proclivities' or even his own nascent arousal. That was a good stroke of plot.
Hope you keep at it.
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Looking forward to the next part, and I am very glad you decided to have a crack at writing this!
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I just don't think that Sam would change his moral code just because the prostitute was male instead of female, so it comes across as a bit OOC.
All said, I do hope you continue this work.
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