Fic: Jabberwocky, Part 27b, Green Cortina, Sytaxia

[sytaxia]

Gene slowly sat up and coughed a thick, short smoker’s cough as he awoke, stretching his arms and legs as he sat up on top of one of the camp beds that he’d set up in Chris’ spare room and feeling his back crackle slightly as he did so.  He pulled out his cigarettes and lit one, idly scratching at his chest and crotch as he pulled

Comments

[tatlovestea]

All the clues have been planted? Your genius is unquestionable and your writing is as dazzling as ever. Thought I knew who it was but after reading that last part I'm not so sure anymore. In fact, I'm more confused than ever... :S Will have to start from the beginning again, methinks! Might take a while!
Also, love that Ray and Glen were chatting about the Wizard of Oz. ♥

[sytaxia]

Wow... My head just swelled like a balloon for a moment, there - thanks so very much for the lovely compliment!

I'm very glad that you're enjoying the story, and that I've managed to make the mystery work well for you. I'm actually planning on revising and tightening the entire thing, and then offering it up as a "director's cut" of the story for download on megaupload or something like that once it's finished, so that will be available soon...

Glad that you liked the Wizard of Oz references - I'm trying to work in as many as possible without making them glaring :)

[talkingtothesky]

Eeek, Sam left alone with Denslow = not good! Then again, I might be overreacting, and you're just spinning us for six again, in which case I'm more confused than ever.

Still absolutely loving the Sam/Gene moments, and Sam's frustration/confusion is very sad and very well written. And Annie is really going to have to watch herself now, it's only a matter of time before someone finds out...(For some reason, I am now starting to think that just maybe Williams is telling the truth. Annie's not stupid, and maybe the extra information she finds about planted fingerprints might just be of use, hopefully in helping/protecting Sam and unmasking the killer.)

Basically, I am absolutely loving this! I am anxious for more! :D

[sytaxia]

Annie is definitely not stupid, and even she might not want to keep the truth from Sam or Gene for very long, although she's definitely got her reasons for doing so, with Gene so hot after Williams' blood - if Williams is telling the truth, it would only put him in danger to tell Gene, wouldn't it?

And Gene was downstairs while Sam was alone with Denslow; although as I've said before, Denslow might be good, might be bad, might be an unwitting pawn - I'm glad that you're feeling so confused about him; it makes me feel like my writing has been effective, and I really appreciate the comments :)

[saintvic]

Loved the interaction between Glen and Ray at the beginning of this - seeing a underused character from the series really grow and shine through is one of the many things I love here.

And there is a real sense that you are building towards something that is going to make me declare you are evil again. A sense of dread and a feeling of tension permeates through all of this.

Fabulous!

[sytaxia]

I'm glad that you enjoyed the Glen and Ray in this - I was afraid of putting them together, because I really wanted to show them as starting to be buddies, but I knew that Ray would eventually end up making racist comments, and Glen would likely retaliate by insulting Ray's intelligence, so it was incredibly difficult to do it... Very glad that it worked out well for you :)

I'm also glad that the sense of foreboding was there for you; there is definitely something coming, perhaps a few things... I am evil, I swear *facepalms*

Thanks very much for commenting, and I'm glad that you're enjoying the fic.

[nepthys_uk]

Fantastic stuff! I also really loved the interaction between Ray and Glen in this installment - believable and convincing for both of them. Bring on the next episode - I'm on the edge of my seat here! :)

[sytaxia]

Thanks very much for commenting, and I'm very glad that you're enjoying, and that Glen and Ray came out well for you - I was very frightened that they wouldn't work out well, so your reassurances mean a lot to me.

I will definitely try to post more soon; I really do wish that I could get the parts up faster, and Dakfinv is certainly inspiring me to write more quickly, so hopefully I'll be able to get more up soon...

[duckyone]

I've said it before and I'll say it again. I don't trust Denslow. And when you posted the symbol a few weeks back, I swore it looked like a stylised WD. But that's most likely your clever attempts to throw me off the trail. I just love a good mystery.

Thank you for another excellent chapter. Can't wait for the next one.

[sytaxia]

Thanks very much; I'm very glad that you're enjoying the mystery aspect of this, and that the plot is working out so well for you :) You may or may not be right about the symbol; more on that will come in later parts....

I'll try to get the next chapter up soon; I'm sorry that I haven't been able to get them up more quickly, and I really am trying to speed it up...

Thanks very much for commenting, and I'm glad that you're enjoying the fic :)

[duckyone]

Please don't take my anticipation for the next chapter as a criticism. The length of your chapters more than make up for the time in between them.

[sytaxia]

Sorry about that; I hope my response didn't sound defensive, or anything - I really appreciate your feedback, and it's more myself than anyone else that's making me want to crank out the chapters more quickly :)