Fic: The Kept Man (29/40), brown cortina, dakfinv

[dakfinv]

Title: The Kept Man (29/40)
Author: dak
Word Count: 1427 this part; [54,084 overall]
Rating: brown cortina
Warnings: angst, sexual situations, swearing
Spoilers: 1.04, 1.05, 1.07, 2.08
Pairing: Sam/Warren, Sam/Gene
Summary: AU. Sam woke up with amnesia when he landed in 1973, able to only remember his name, and ended up in the grasp of Stephen Warren.

Comments

[shishmish]

“Warren offered you a way home. Morgan offered you a way. Maybe you should find your own.” He started to walk away from the table.

Thats probably the most sensible and intelligent thing Gene has ever said in this fic; Sam has been offered all these ways home, ways that hurt not just himself but others and include great risk - maybe his way home is something that'll happen when he least expects it?

[mikes_grrl]

I'm with Shishmish here, on this being possibly the best "Gene" moment in the story.

Not that it helps Sam much, because now Sam doesn't trust himself, but still...smart move, Gene. For a change.

And I'm also with Ange: brilliant use of imagery here, overall. Sam's dispondancy is so clearly mirrored in the endless 'drip drip', and Gene's real emotions revealed by the destruction of the poor innocent pink wafer. Wonderfully done!

Now, though, I despair of Sam getting home. If Gene keeps playing it smart, then Sam won't want to kill him, and he'll be trapped in his hell forever. *shudders* Wah!!

*still eyes secondary characters with great suspicion, and waiting for the contents of that safe to show up...yes, I am easily distracted...*

[dakfinv]

If Gene keeps playing it smart, then Sam won't want to kill him, and he'll be trapped in his hell forever.
Of course, that's assuming that the only way home is killing Gene.

I'm glad you liked the imagery. I was worried the "drips" might be more annoying than anything else.

Thank you!

[mikes_grrl]

Of course, that's assuming that the only way home is killing Gene.

Well, yeah, that's my assumption, mostly based off of canon, which I know doesn't mean a lot in a totally AU story like this, but I'm grasping at straws here! Gimme something!!! *whines*

The 'drip' effect was not annoying, I think it conveyed the whole mood of the scene beautifully. Yeah, it was very repetitive, but it flowed within the context of Sam's discontent and disarray. Well done!

[angeweeks]

Oh this is just brilliant. The crumbling wafers, the dripping tap - awesome imagery.

This really is going to get a hell of a lot worse before it gets better, isn't it?! *wibbles*

[dakfinv]

Thank you! Uhm, yes. Yes, there will probably be some very bad parts coming up...

[demonthief13]

Oh God, I go away to Wales for a week and suddenly Sam gets his memories back! Wow!

[dakfinv]

Magical things can happen in Wales. :)

[icudoc]

Do you know , the one thing that struck me after reading this one is you can write for these characters in such a way that is completely believeable and in character.
Not bad for a Yank! ;)
Another excellent piece of work.

[dakfinv]

Thank you! (I just watch way too much telly, that's all.)

[jpgr]

You're building up to something, aren't you? I can tell. Explosion or meltdown, I'm not sure. Again, marvelous job.

OT, but...

[mikes_grrl]

Spaced!Simm icon = LOVE

Re: OT, but...

[jpgr]

Ta! Made it last night. Not the clearest but, well, I couldn't resist that shot. You're welcome to take if you wish.

[dakfinv]

Either way, it probably won't be good...

Thank you!

(Now if you'll excuse me, I, too, am going to stare in happiness at your gorgeous icon.)