Fic: We Are The Abyss

[entangled_now]

Title: We Are The Abyss
Fandom: Supernatural
Pairing: Sam/Dean
Rating: R
Word Count: 7,859
Spoilers: None
Warnings: Incest, the Apocalypse, death
Summary/Prompt: Dean never figured he'd be there for the end of the world.
AN: Written for storydivagirl for the apocalyptothon . Huge thank you to sarren for betaing this for me.

Comments

[zeitheist]

... material shifting to reveal skin laced through with flares of black...

I actually had a moment of gut-wrenching, heart-stopping, "NO!". Oh, Dean. Oh, Sam. I was tearing up by the last line, and I had to sit here and sniffle dejectedly for a minute. You broke the boys!

There are so many beautiful lines in this, grim images and harsh situations, but still eloquently expressed. It's haunting. The last three paragraphs of the first section are excellent, but here are some more I liked:

"He looks really lonely. Late night pay-per-view lonely. If I was this thing, I'd eat him."

It was a crumpled mess of blue-white limbs. They'd contracted in death like a spider's.

"That's really nice," Dean said, and finished the rest of his burger

Dean ignored him in favour of fries, lots of fries. Sam looked away until he'd at least managed to contain them inside his mouth.

There were two boys in the back seat, no more than ten or twelve. They looked for all the world like they'd tumbled together and fallen asleep.

The child seemed to be made entirely of curling yellow hair and nervous eyes. The fine tree of black made her look fragile, almost alien.

Later in the day they drove past the diner on their way out of town and the 'closed' sign hung in the window. Sam couldn't shake the feeling that it would never say 'open' again.

The herd animals were dying.

The lights were just gone.

(I just started re-reading the ending, and the opening of Patrick Wolf's This Weather started playing on the iPod, which is possibly the most mournful opening ever, and I'm not kidding, I started crying again. D8).

ps. I think you have a tiny formatting problem on the line that begins "Jesus, the death toll was impossible...".

[entangled_now]

I really loved the opportunity to just tear everything down in this (you rarely get to do that conscience free in fic.) So I'm very glad that the whole thing worked for you, I'm going to take that as a huge compliment.

It's wonderful when people point out the parts they liked so thank you for that! And it's nice when they're parts that I really wanted to work.

I fixed the tiny formatting, thanks!