Thought But Never Said

[jackiejlh]

Title: Thought But Never Said
Rating: R
Characters: Paul/Madeline
Word Count: 3,330
Summary: Set during 'Three Eyed Turtle', between the confrontation with George in the hangar and Operations' meeting with him the next morning.
Warnings: As it's set during Three Eyed Turtle, I probably don't need to tell anyone reading that there's going to be

Comments

[jaybee65]

Oh MAN.

This is fabulous and perfect and beyond my capability to describe right now because I'm just so bowled over.

You write beautifully (!!), and you capture them so perfectly that it makes my heart ache. I'll be back to give you more (less flaily, more thoughtful) feedback later (once I've had a chance to reread and savor this).

Also, it's my first and probably only LFN fic

I hope not the only one!

[jackiejlh]

Thank you thank you thank you! Seriously, I was incredibly nervous posting this, and it's so nice to hear that the characters came across well, and that it, you know, made sense. Lol. (The writing style isn't one I'd done before, and it made me incredibly nervous.) I just couldn't stop thinking about how for one night, they really believed they'd won, that two years of planning and pretending had finally paid off. The episode jumps from their confrontation with George to Paul's meeting with him the next morning, and of course we learn that those two years of planning have been a waste after all, but for just that one night... they had hope. I can't see them as people who rely on hope very often, if ever, but at that point, they had to have believed that things were finally going to change for them, for the better. It's almost heartbreaking, in a way, and I couldn't help wanting to explore that a bit...

[jaybee65]

Sorry it took me so long to come back to this! (I've had internet access issues the past few days, argh.)

First of all, I think the writing style you chose works incredibly well. It suits the character perfectly, and it also reflects the nature of the show itself (and this episode in particular), where everything almost always meant something other than what appeared on the surface.

I can't see them as people who rely on hope very often, if ever, but at that point, they had to have believed that things were finally going to change for them, for the better. It's almost heartbreaking, in a way

It *is* heartbreaking when you look at it like that. That's why this story really got to me the way it did: you've taken this moment and really deepened it!

I really look forward to reading more from you, whether in this fandom or any other!

[jackiejlh]

Thank you! :) I don't know if I'll be writing much more LFN, at least in the near future--I'm up to my ears in WIPs just taking up space on my harddrive--but it's definitely a possibility because I love these characters. :D

[debbiebiv]

OMG! That was just....Oh My God! Brilliant. So good, and as Jaybee said you captured them both so brilliantly. I'm certainly hope you write more

[jackiejlh]

Thank you!! *blush* I'm so glad the characters came across well--it always make me nervous diving in to a new fandom, and considering that this one has been around for so long, I was terrified of just completely missing the mark or writing something awfully cliched. Lol. I couldn't help but write it, though; by mid-season two, I was forcing myself to avoid fanfiction until I finished everything, but I wanted to write about Madeline from, um, day one. Lol.

[sk56]

Oh, I like this very much -- you've got a real line into these characters and their twisty ways.

I came late to LFN (the show and the fiction) though not quite as late as you!) so I understand the gobsmacked sensation.

I like the idea of the paper notes -- there's another story somewhere that toys with the idea, but you've made a very realistic and detailed job of it.

And the parenthetical stuff -- just excellent!

[jackiejlh]

Thank you!! It's weird, coming in to a fandom that seems to have been pretty quiet for a good long while--before this I've always jumped into fandoms at the beginning. This was new for me. :)

I'm glad the paper notes thing came across well. It was pestering me ever since I randomly stumbled across the LFN IMDB page and saw the 'Trivia' fact that no one ever uses paper inside of Section One. While there are plenty of good reasons for that, it made me wonder how many things happened outside of the computer system that they just never saw because they weren't really looking anymore.