First, I love how you started the Temple scene with ‘a paled orange shadow’ spread over the dead bodies: it’s all covered in a fading sunlight but it’s so chilling and such a gruesome finality is in the piled bodies; them being so different in the life and being just two broken bodies in the death. Very strong and gloomy image!
Denna, Denna. You know I love her so much! She has a defiance going deep into her core and she is like Phoenix who always rises back from the ashes. And lol, she hates to do a common work which warms me, idk. She is such a hunter when she hears Lorel gleeful humming! I immediately thought, like, oh-oh, poor Lorel, soon you would forget being so relaxed and happy.
"You. Come here." Just UNF, Denna is the Mistress no matter what are the circumstances! Oh, she can lure in the poor girl. “a lamb” exactly! Also, I like how she even didn’t try to escape. She is just waits for her fate, wow.
The whole scene was so awesome! Lorel’s desperate rebelliousness in the beginning and then her fright for her child’s fate, Denna played her so rationally and cruelly but without overdoing it. I think it’s Denna’s personality that she is cruel like all Mord’Siths are but she just uses it for her advantage without too much indulging in it. Idk, maybe I am wrong and I see her better than she is.
"The best things in life often come in threes. First there was Lord Rahl, Mistress Nathair, and me. Then... there was Mistress Cara, Mistress Dahlia and me. And now...it will be Mistress Nathair, me, and our child." Idk, I just loved Denna’s delusional thinking, just love it!
"if their bodies grew cold, something inside me would've broken." Awwww, that was sweet! She is sensitive. I know that some people can sense others, idk. I never felt it but my other brother is a very sensitive person and he can see prophetic dreams. True. “Soon you will be free, save your tears. The world out there needs them more." Honestly? You owned me there! ILU! Such a true statement! "First," Denna explained, "you are going to clean this floor and I will tend to Mistress Nathair." Haha, of course Lorel HAD to end up cleaning the floor! Awesome scene!
Thank you for these comments, you know how much they always mean to me and I want to start to reply to them. I really want to try to stick with this story, I will TRY and if in a couple days, I am still unable to get anywhere, I will start the X/D story
Anyway, I was thinking alot about failure when I wrote the opening scene, like the reality of what happens to the girls who just aren't strong enough and how the world just goes on, the sun rises, someone cleans up, idk.. and when we were talking about getting a slave to do Denna's chores, I was thinking of how gruesome her chores would really be...
Aww yes I think of Denna as a Phoenix too and I'm also finding a lot of honor and more sensitivity in her than I expected. On the other hand, I think of Lorel as a true slave, a "lamb" but I wanted to also explore how that would conflict with both Denna and Lorel's maternal instincts and no, you aren't wrong about how you see Denna "cruel like all Mord’Siths are but she just uses it for her advantage without too much indulging in it" cuz that's how I view her and understand her as well...
Denna's thinking about threes is delusional and just so hardcore. I almost wrote "First there was my mother, father, and me." and then go on with Lord Rahl etc but I don't think Denna would really think like that. Anyway, with that statement, Denna also wanted to make it clear to Lorel that Lorel did not belong now and that Denna's resolve was SO strong
"something inside me would've broken" Idk it just came out of her mouth, I have no idea why but yeah, I guess it is sensitivity. I think she also holds onto the bonds of her Sisters a little closer these days because it allows her to sustain her identity as a Mord'Sith in some twisted ways.
"Soon you will be free, save your tears. The world out there needs them more." She definitely meant that with all sincerity. I'm happy you liked this scene, it was a hard moment for Denna to realize what she was going to have to do but she does definitely get things done and even though she is taking huge risks and gambles, I think she's discovering pieces of hope again, which I imagine is just the best thing ever. Thank you, ILU too. continuing a little later
Phew! Finally, lj is back! Idk for how long! I’ll try to type my reply as fast as I can. First, you know how much I like your writing and it is an honor and pleasure for me to write my little comments.
You write what you feel can inspire you and give you some comfort, ok? I like the idea of failure. Even girls weren’t supposed to become M’S they had to be stronger just to survive, even to live a pet’s live! Cuz if they had the fire of defiance in them I am sure that they would be given a BoL. Yeah, I liked that!
And of course, Denna’s chores! For her only problem was how to wash out that much blood, she’d seen too many scenes like this one to somehow react to it. M’S’s everyday life. I did though, haha.
“Aww yes I think of Denna as a Phoenix too and I'm also finding a lot of honor and more sensitivity in her than I expected.” I love when you speak of them having their own life! You expect them to act a certain way but your heroines have own independent lives! ILU! Yeah, Lorel is a true slave but she is also a strong girl, she has her little dignity left, like she promised herself not to bend to a will of other slaves. And Lorel’s maternal instinct fascinates me cuz why would she want to bring a child to such a horrible place! And yet, it’s only a natural instinct which brought all of us here and let humanity survive as a species. Idk, I understand M’S pov on this matter better, oops.
And yes, I like Denna a lot I like all her flaws and qualities. “I almost wrote "First there was my mother, father, and me." Wow, it could’ve been too scary. It’s good that you started from Rahl and Nathair. I think it was a perfect decision! Idk, I think that the memories of her mom are only what keep her sane. Dahlia and Cara had each other to survive. Snake had no one obviously and she went completely bananas. And Denna somehow left her mom in her heart, maybe because her mom was a special person. Imho or is it just my imagination? But, yeah, Lorel doesn’t belong there, Denna does. Yes, you are right about the Sisterhood. But do you remember Cara in Reckoning, when she captured Richard and brought him to the Temple? Until she saw some skeletons, she didn’t feel anything. I still think that Denna is a sensitive one. I liked how Jessica played her in a first season, how intense she was, I expected her to strike or burst in tears and couldn’t tell what she’ll choose to do. But I like your Denna much better and I love her being a thin-skinned person.
Oh, yes, Denna can face her fate with eyes wide open and alert! She gambles, she knows what she’s doing and you are awesomely right “she's discovering pieces of hope again, which I imagine is just the best thing ever.” Yeah!
Denna, Denna. You know I love her so much! She has a defiance going deep into her core and she is like Phoenix who always rises back from the ashes. And lol, she hates to do a common work which warms me, idk. She is such a hunter when she hears Lorel gleeful humming! I immediately thought, like, oh-oh, poor Lorel, soon you would forget being so relaxed and happy.
"You. Come here." Just UNF, Denna is the Mistress no matter what are the circumstances! Oh, she can lure in the poor girl. “a lamb” exactly! Also, I like how she even didn’t try to escape. She is just waits for her fate, wow.
The whole scene was so awesome! Lorel’s desperate rebelliousness in the beginning and then her fright for her child’s fate, Denna played her so rationally and cruelly but without overdoing it. I think it’s Denna’s personality that she is cruel like all Mord’Siths are but she just uses it for her advantage without too much indulging in it. Idk, maybe I am wrong and I see her better than she is.
"The best things in life often come in threes. First there was Lord Rahl, Mistress Nathair, and me. Then... there was Mistress Cara, Mistress Dahlia and me. And now...it will be Mistress Nathair, me, and our child." Idk, I just loved Denna’s delusional thinking, just love it!
"if their bodies grew cold, something inside me would've broken." Awwww, that was sweet! She is sensitive. I know that some people can sense others, idk. I never felt it but my other brother is a very sensitive person and he can see prophetic dreams. True.
“Soon you will be free, save your tears. The world out there needs them more." Honestly? You owned me there! ILU! Such a true statement!
"First," Denna explained, "you are going to clean this floor and I will tend to Mistress Nathair." Haha, of course Lorel HAD to end up cleaning the floor!
Awesome scene!
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Anyway, I was thinking alot about failure when I wrote the opening scene, like the reality of what happens to the girls who just aren't strong enough and how the world just goes on, the sun rises, someone cleans up, idk.. and when we were talking about getting a slave to do Denna's chores, I was thinking of how gruesome her chores would really be...
Aww yes I think of Denna as a Phoenix too and I'm also finding a lot of honor and more sensitivity in her than I expected. On the other hand, I think of Lorel as a true slave, a "lamb" but I wanted to also explore how that would conflict with both Denna and Lorel's maternal instincts and no, you aren't wrong about how you see Denna "cruel like all Mord’Siths are but she just uses it for her advantage without too much indulging in it" cuz that's how I view her and understand her as well...
Denna's thinking about threes is delusional and just so hardcore. I almost wrote "First there was my mother, father, and me." and then go on with Lord Rahl etc but I don't think Denna would really think like that. Anyway, with that statement, Denna also wanted to make it clear to Lorel that Lorel did not belong now and that Denna's resolve was SO strong
"something inside me would've broken" Idk it just came out of her mouth, I have no idea why but yeah, I guess it is sensitivity. I think she also holds onto the bonds of her Sisters a little closer these days because it allows her to sustain her identity as a Mord'Sith in some twisted ways.
"Soon you will be free, save your tears. The world out there needs them more." She definitely meant that with all sincerity. I'm happy you liked this scene, it was a hard moment for Denna to realize what she was going to have to do but she does definitely get things done and even though she is taking huge risks and gambles, I think she's discovering pieces of hope again, which I imagine is just the best thing ever. Thank you, ILU too. continuing a little later
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You write what you feel can inspire you and give you some comfort, ok?
I like the idea of failure. Even girls weren’t supposed to become M’S they had to be stronger just to survive, even to live a pet’s live! Cuz if they had the fire of defiance in them I am sure that they would be given a BoL. Yeah, I liked that!
And of course, Denna’s chores! For her only problem was how to wash out that much blood, she’d seen too many scenes like this one to somehow react to it. M’S’s everyday life. I did though, haha.
“Aww yes I think of Denna as a Phoenix too and I'm also finding a lot of honor and more sensitivity in her than I expected.” I love when you speak of them having their own life! You expect them to act a certain way but your heroines have own independent lives! ILU!
Yeah, Lorel is a true slave but she is also a strong girl, she has her little dignity left, like she promised herself not to bend to a will of other slaves. And Lorel’s maternal instinct fascinates me cuz why would she want to bring a child to such a horrible place! And yet, it’s only a natural instinct which brought all of us here and let humanity survive as a species. Idk, I understand M’S pov on this matter better, oops.
And yes, I like Denna a lot I like all her flaws and qualities.
“I almost wrote "First there was my mother, father, and me." Wow, it could’ve been too scary. It’s good that you started from Rahl and Nathair. I think it was a perfect decision! Idk, I think that the memories of her mom are only what keep her sane. Dahlia and Cara had each other to survive. Snake had no one obviously and she went completely bananas. And Denna somehow left her mom in her heart, maybe because her mom was a special person. Imho or is it just my imagination?
But, yeah, Lorel doesn’t belong there, Denna does.
Yes, you are right about the Sisterhood. But do you remember Cara in Reckoning, when she captured Richard and brought him to the Temple? Until she saw some skeletons, she didn’t feel anything. I still think that Denna is a sensitive one. I liked how Jessica played her in a first season, how intense she was, I expected her to strike or burst in tears and couldn’t tell what she’ll choose to do. But I like your Denna much better and I love her being a thin-skinned person.
Oh, yes, Denna can face her fate with eyes wide open and alert! She gambles, she knows what she’s doing and you are awesomely right “she's discovering pieces of hope again, which I imagine is just the best thing ever.” Yeah!
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