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[leviticus_lied]

I was GOING to write about my first day of college, but, no. I just received a review of a Monk story I wrote a year and a half ago, Adrian/Ambrose, which is an incestuous pair.

The reviewer wrote, "Sorry, but I don't condone incest. This story should be removed."

And I sort of sent her a reply that kindly asked her to fuck off because she didn't

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[leviticus_lied]

I just graduated high school last week, early, so. You're not alone on the age thing. It's just that my PhD mother needs a proofreader.

"My leadership profile marks me for success in the endeavor to lead up because my decadent tenure in government service provides a keen comfort for rules and regulations."

Debra wrote that. Okay. Let's look at this.

Her profile marks her for success. This doesn't make sense. How can a profile marks her? It can indicate her tendency toward one style or another. It can't predict success, and definitely not with any accuracy.

The endeavor to lead up. What the hell is that? Lead what up? Why endeavor to do it instead of just doing it?

My decadent tenure. Decadent? Lavish, luxurious seniority within the business? My mother and I came to the conclusion that she meant decade, as in, she's been there for a decade. She just got it wrong.

Keen comfort for rules. It's an oxymoron. Keen is sharp and insistent, comfort is soft and easy. We figured that she meant... eager or energetic, she just can't operate a thesaurus. And the comfort is more like familiarity with the structure and operation of the rules, but.

Just, altogether, it doesn't make sense. Read it all the way through. It just doesn't.

[miri_d]

Hah. My mother definitely would never ask me to proofread, probably because I'd end up picking the actual subject and arguments apart, rather than just check for spelling and grammar.

I definitely agree that the sentence sounded pretentious and just generically off, and I caught the "lead up" bit (and thought I was missing something), but I couldn't pinpoint what made it bad, like you did. Thank you.

Also, congrats on graduating early! I wish I'd gone for that, because my next semester is going to be utter hell.