FIC for orpheus_samhain: "Call of the Dark"

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Title: Call of the Dark
Author: esmestrella
Recipient: orpheus_samhain
Rating: R
Words: ~3,800
Warnings: Some purple prose, brief drug use, slight dub-con (but see rating; no sex).
Summary: Severus has learned that Dark magic can burn away his imperfections, but can he convince Lily to see it his way?
Author's Notes: For orpheus_samhain, who at the eleventh hour was bereft of a gift. This

Comments

[orpheus_samhain]

When you told me about your surprise fic I was so touched, because we know why I was bereft of the gift :) It was my own fault. Thank you very much!

This fic is just beautiful, you know? :) Sad, bitter, poetic and beautiful. It has a dreamlike quality to it. Or maybe it's reminiscing. The words flow so smoothly that they carry you through the whole story without any effort.

I love how you chose the potion's ingredients :) very telling.

Severus was so engrossed in his goal of equalling himself to Purebloods through the Dark magic that he was completely blind to what she wanted, needed and, well, was. The rituals, the purging is chilling. Alchemy, that's what comes to my mind when I read this. Gold out of lead.

As he came into his palm with her name on his lips, he realized that without even setting out to, he'd obtained tears as well.

That line made me go "Guh!" Forget her - easily told.

I love that Lily recognised the potion, wanted to try Severus and in the end let him go :)

I always enjoy the darker side of Snape, he was drawn to the Dark Arts for a reason, there must have been something powerful luring him (or only his perception of this, but still). I was surprised that in canon he didn't contact Lily after Hogwarts, how could he resist?

And that fin-de-siecle touch at the end *_*

[shyfoxling]

It has a dreamlike quality to it. Or maybe it's reminiscing. The words flow so smoothly that they carry you through the whole story without any effort.

I wanted it to have a dreamy quality to it, so it's great to hear I succeeded. It was supposed to be thematically linked to the laudanum, the idea of "opium dreams".

The rituals, the purging is chilling. Alchemy, that's what comes to my mind when I read this. Gold out of lead.

Absolutely. Yay, I did that right too. :)

And that fin-de-siecle touch at the end *_*

I have a bit of a kink for use of certain drugs in fic, and opium is one of them... it seemed to have the right "dark" feel to it.

So in summary, SQUEE!