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FIC for tjwritter: "The Fates"

Jun 21, 2008 21:39

Title: The Fates
Author: missyvortexdv
Recipient: tjwritter
Rating: PG-13
Words: ~4,000
Warnings: none
Summary: Severus had hope once, and what life did not take away from him, he gave away bit by bit in a fruitless search for something better than this.
Author's Notes: Written for tjwritter.

( The Fates )

fic, round_2008

Comments 21

tjs_whatnot June 23 2008, 00:28:46 UTC

That was SOOOOO beautiful, meaningful and awe-inspiring! I'm defintely going to have to read it over and over and suck every single breathtaking image and feeling from it!

Even if I had been more specific with my request--this is EXACTLY the request I would have made!

Thank you so much mystery author!!

I'm just sorry that your story came at the end where it seems people are lily/snaped out!! I will be directing anyone I can though to read this mastered piece of art!

missyvortexdv July 1 2008, 16:20:51 UTC

I'm so glad you enjoyed it and many thanks for recommending it as I was getting a bit down at having had no feedback for the first day or two after its posting. :)

tjs_whatnot July 1 2008, 18:28:20 UTC

I was glad to rec it--and I'm glad that a handful of my friends got the chance to read it! It was so completely different then anything else that had been written but it came at a time when no one was reading...I know, I wrote the one that came after you :)

color_me_verde June 23 2008, 01:35:08 UTC

That was beyond words. So moving.

I've often thought about different scenarios for Snape/Lily to end up happily in my head but of course they were all rather futile attempts. Seeing Snape basically torture himself with this same occupation seems just like something he would do. *sigh* So sad.

missyvortexdv July 1 2008, 16:24:15 UTC

Strangely I hadn't thought about it much myself, as I'd been a shipper for a few years but not in fandom or writing until I agreed to do this exchange. I'm sure there's got to be plenty, or else there'd be no fluff for the ship, but I perversely liked the idea that how Severus got through that decade or so was on the hope that he could still fix it, get everything back, and not caring about the dark magic, carrying it on his love and desperation.

I feel almost guilty at making it so despairing but wanted it to slot into canon believably. I'm glad to hear it was a moving story. :)

loxian June 23 2008, 02:13:15 UTC

This seems so true - there can't be a happy and yet believable Lily/Snape scenario, no matter how much Severus would like to make it so... And it was beautifully written. I liked the details you put in about how the magic works, and the little vignette of 'Mad Severus' with Lily humouring him. I especially loved the way you brought it full circle back to Harry again at the end and tied it in to canon: though it's sad to see his death, it's good that he has found some kind of peace at the end. I'm here, by the way, because tjwritter said your story was great and everyone should read it. So I did, and I'm glad, though it's not a pairing I would normally read. Now I'll go and look at all the other gifts...

missyvortexdv July 1 2008, 16:30:26 UTC

I wanted to ground each of the realities, so even though these are mere possibilities he sees, they are very much real worlds he could make, and was seeing.

As for tying into canon; it took me a great deal of thinking over the AU aspects before I realised the sense of not having a happy ending, of making these a stopgap, something he could never go through with, more about the journey than the destination, that would of course be as we already know it to be.

Thanks so much for following the rec, reading and giving feedback. I was getting a tad disheartened at the lack at first, with it being near the end of the month of fic/art. :)

lavinialavender June 23 2008, 06:47:41 UTC

This is gorgeous. I think the last book gave us a lot of difficulties, but you make it all so profound again, you bring out the best and truest elements of the ship. Thank you, this is gorgeous, and gorgeously written.

I think my favorite part, as far as the writing of the story, is this bit of description: Finally she comes to a stop again, faces him over her shoulder with eyes that look inflamed, the skin around them red and a passion in them that suddenly makes him blanche. Fantastic, fantastic imagery.

missyvortexdv July 1 2008, 18:33:14 UTC

Why thank you. :D

I have a tendancy to veer towards more poetic sometimes and I never know if it's a good or a bad thing lol.

shyfoxling June 23 2008, 08:08:53 UTC

Interesting idea. I'm saddened by the way all these possible lives fall apart for Severus. Some of them are very creepy indeed.

He'd often wondered what was the worst choice he'd made -- calling her a Mudblood, sticking by his Slytherin "friends", or reporting the prophecy overheard. Here he's made far worse. The darkest vengeful desire of his is fulfilled and he sees it, feels it, near as lives it and is ashamed to not feel as horrified as he would think.

That's chilling.

"But he doesn't know who you are. You know how it is with this torture, you've seen plenty of victims. He won't remember you visited!"

"I will."

Ooohhh... a little light for him at least.

missyvortexdv July 1 2008, 18:34:34 UTC

Thanks for the feedback. :)