Jack Daniels and cigarettes

[lemanya]

The very first thing I noticed was that he tasted like Jack Daniels and cigarettes.

It was strange, the obnoxious outbursts in the local patron’s conversations was transformed into a warm drowsy hum of background noise as I was enveloped by his smell, his feel and his taste.

What never struck me as odd was why I was kissing him. It was one of those

Comments

[a_minor_third]

I love the narration in this piece, seriously. You should continue on.

[nattydreadd]

This is really good, I think you should carry this on.
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[xiuhcoati]

This might work as a piece of flash-fiction, although if that were so you'd have to work on the repetition of Jack Daniels and cigarettes. The first time you say it (as a phrase) it's magic. The second and third time not so much. Just a thought.