I desperately need opinions of this

[lecricket]

The following is a short story I am submitting to a contest and the granbd prize is some sum of money with at least two zeros after a one. PLEASE if you ever comment in here (which you do but especially now) do it in this entry.

Comments

[benjisriotgurl6]

... that was a very "wow" like story, my mouth kinda dropped open alot in that story, it was good.
but i was confused with this u said "Mme Beauxfois, Charles uncle." then u said later " Trying not to scream she backed up into something and spun around the see Mme Beauxfois, standing behind her. “Oh aunt Marie.” She said shaking. "
so yeah Mme Beauxfois is suppose to be charles aunt right? im kinda confused there.

[lecricket]

Oops, yeah, she's supposed to be his Aunt. I'll have to change that.

Wow, I'm glad you liked it. I was really scared that it would suck.

[lizzikitty]

Lovelylovelylovelylovelylovely. Do I have to type anything else? I really am content with just typing that.

The details and old-like style it's written in are beautiful, and it completely had me taken by surprised and more than a little afraid. Haunting, this is. And did I mention the details?

Oh, enter this anywhere and you shall win, ma cher ami! Lovely. <3

[lecricket]

AWWWWW merci beaucoup, ami! I am flattered that you liked it, and glad you did, I really am nervous about this contest. I wanted it to be a surprise ending and not modern, so I think I did well.

A tout a l'heure