Arashi fic- Of Fish and Wish

[lybra87]

Title: Of Fish and Wish
Pairing: Ohno/Nino
Rating: G
Word Count: 1475
Disclaimer: Don't own, all fiction.
Summary: The dangers of fishing.
Notes: For the ever awesome and currently sick Zan, get well soon! To another great year ahead, and may the next 363 days before your next birthday be filled with good stuff  ^___^

Comments

[kos_mos26]

That was...wow.

Your technical style is incredible. It's incredibly rare see anyone write consistently in present tense while in third person perspective. Not to mention I've never seen anyone go without quotation marks to differentiate dialogue from narration. It was hard to get used to, but it was cool once I did.

It all melded together so well into a simple Ohmiya story full of all things Ohmiya (and a few things Sakuraiba ;D) It wasn't heartbreaking, or devastating, or overly dramatic. It was gentle and soothing, and real, even in displaying the stress and tension between Ohno and Nino.

I love, love, love, love this fic. Simple, clean, and beautiful.

[lybra87]

in present tense while in third person perspective ^^;; So that's what's wrong with it! You know, I fiddled so much with it, not sure what I wasn't quite getting. At first it was a terrible hodgepodge of past and present, then it was all present, then all past, before I decided to stick with all present for the tone of it...sorry about the quotation mark thing, but it's just a personal quirk, after I got sick of coming up with a hundred different ways to replace 'he said' :P

Thank you so much! Urgh, I haven't wrote Ohmiya in a long time, was really worried I messed up their dynamics. And much I love all the blatant, wacky ohmiya all over the place, I'm really quite bad at capturing the extent of their very interesting chemistry so please pardon for any 'off' bits. But I'm really happy it wasn't too bad and that you liked it ^___^ Thank you for the taking the time to read!

♥

[i_am_zan]

Ohhh thank you so much dear! This is wonderful! I still have a bad cough and was abed by 9 so I missed you putting this up!

oh but this is wonderful and I am totally enamored with the present tense, you know this, in as much as I'm totally enamored that this is OhMiya! With the subtle SakurAiba thrown in as the JunToshi moment. I love that Aiba worries about Ohno and Ohno and Nino and ...ohh and HOMY!!!!

How long away have you come from those Wild Adapter fics. You should try writing one now it would be beyond amazing!

THIS! Is a wonderful wonderful birthday present well worth the wait! *HUGSfic close to chest!*

[lybra87]

*Would tackleglompsquishhug you, if you're feeling better, if not just HUGHUGHUG for now, take care of yourself dear*

hehe this is a bit...but I really hope you liked it! And that it helped to cheer you up a bit, I would be very happy if it did a little ^___^ Thank you! The present tense...haha, that was a bit tricky to work with, but the Ohno voice in my head wanted that! XD And I am as amused by Ohno's fishing issues as much as Nino's issues with Ohno and Ohno's fishing (ie. VS Arashi 100819 :D) And ohmiya never fails to entertain me, and throw Jun into the fray...^^ (Sorry, Sho refused to stay away from Aiba, so sakuraiba sneaked in as well--> blames Sho XD)

If you have time: http://www.tudou.com/programs/view/j3xRynSVSgE/ A less than one minute long video than inspired this: Nino picking on Ohno's tan, and Ohno making amazing faces and ohmiya- a tale of love and abuse XD

[myjulien]

Aww this was very cute. I liked it much.

[lybra87]

Ah thank you so much! Glad you liked it~! ^___^

[boblemon]

Aw, that was cute! Actually I like Sho's character, since I think he's usually portrayed as the more conservative one. In this he was funny (I especially laughed when he was chiding Ohno but groping Aiba at the same time) and he was so cute with Aiba. And Jun getting a little defensive over Ohno and fighting with Nino was <3<3<3

I liked it very much!

[lybra87]

he's usually portrayed as the more conservative one :) Really? To me I just don't seem to see him that way, hahaha! And I've had many conversations with i_am_zan where she establishes that Sho is basically a big pervert under the guise of 'serious newscaster-keio grad-mother of Arash'. You know that face just hides...stuff. Is what I secretly believe XD

Jun-Ohno-Nino dynamics is...interesting ^^ I love them, when they're acting up with one/all of the other. And this is supposed to be ohmiya but I'm sorry, Sakuraiba always sneaks in. It's the result of watching VSA 10.09.18, and other VSA where Sho unleashes his touchy-feely-ness on Aiba...and as pointed out to me by a fellow SA fan, more than once has Sho been seen chiding AND molesting Aiba at the same time :D

Sorry for long ramble, thank you for reading and glad you liked it! ~♥

[flange5]

You know what I really love about this? The way you write the dynamics of an established relationship--there's no overblown angst about the END OF IT ALL or anything, just that quiet tight claustrophobic feeling when things are off kilter before someone relents ^^; I think that takes a lot of skill and insight.

Also, I love the way Sho is hilariously grope-y and mothering at the same time--there's a gap for you. And Jun pushing it just that bit further and totally knowing it when he does it and. Just.

I guess what I'm trying to say is that I liked this a lot&hearts

[lybra87]

^___^ Thank you! Really happy that you liked it! I was worried if I was getting Ohmiya right, I'm not very good with them. And the dynamics, ah I'm glad it worked! I like Ohmiya when it's quiet and and even though Nino doesn't do subtle on Ohno (for obvious reasons sometimes, I think :P) I just like the feel of that on them. But I'm flattered, thank you &heart;